Spaulds

Ok! So It was a very interesting read and it has good lines, but I think it could use a little bit of work. The first thing I'm gonna say ...

Spaulds here for a review! Ok, This was very well written! Welcome to YWS! First off your ending. I'm sorry but that was really abrupt. The story was going great ...

Wow, this is deep, and true! I completely understand where this came from. I would consider working on your grammar and adding a couple more stanzas. This poem has a ...

This is a beautiful poem! I love everything about it! A couple things, punctuation. There are a lot of commas throughout the poem that I don't think belong there. Also ...

Spaulds here for a review! Ok, I really liked this piece! You really capture the attitude of children! I have a couple little comments though. In line thirteen you say ...

Spaulds here for a review! Ok, so this poem is extremely well written! it flows fantastically and is just about the perfect length! I do have a few small complaints ...

Spaulds here for a review! This was a riveting piece, honestly amazing. While your punctuation is good and your word choice is fantastic, you seem to jump around a little ...

Spaulds here for a review! Wow! may I just say that this is possibly one of the best poems I have ever read! The formatting is a little off though. ...

Ok, you have got the general Idea down on paper. I think you need to fix some typing and spelling errors. Also, I think this is a little short. You ...

I love the beginning, when you drop the reader into events without giving any back round information. It gives the story a life of it's own, you seem to be ...

I love this poem! The subject, the wording, grammar, everything! This is Fantastic! I do have a couple little things to say though. When you say: "My mind Secludes." I ...

Ok, this was a really amazing piece! Of course as usual I have a few little picky things. For starters, when you say, "The oxygen pulled and stolen, from under ...

Nice work Lad! I have heard a lot about this poem and have been waiting to review it! First things first In the line, "A face? A facade? A mask?", ...

Hello! This poem was entertaining and the title caught my eye, I thought "a poem about poetry?" Let me just say you did a fantastic job! It was a little ...

I really haven't read any of the previous chapters to this story, i looked but I couldn't seem to find them. In and of it's self it is a great ...