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  • Poetry » General, General Re: Things

    This seems like quite a personal poem. It looks on life from quite a depressing point of view. The description of the way you see people and things through the ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Other » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense Re: Sword Fight

    Hey yubbies. I think this is a good description of a battle fighting scene, it can be quite hard to get an accurate account of everything that goes on in ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Horror, Narrative Re: Your Suicide Note.

    A very dark topic. Takes a person to be in quite a dark mood to write a poem such as this! I like the imagery in this, the description of ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Brand New Eyes

    Hey Lyla. This is a really good poem. The rhyming works great as well has everything having a meaning. The only thing I thought was vague was the "I sit ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Sound of Tears

    I'll start with the rhythm. It doesn't seem to flow very well and seems very disjointed. Ending s sentence with a connective doesn't have a very good effect and can ...

    Dec 30, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Almighty dollar

    This seems like quite a powerful poem, and had some though put into it. I don't quite understand the first line, and what its intention is to portray, whilst all ...

    Dec 27, 2012
  • Poetry » Fanfiction, General Re: An Ode to Derpy

    Are you aware of the comical phrases "Herp" and "Derp"? I found this a rather amusing poem to read, more than amusing in fact. But that aside its quite a ...

    Dec 16, 2012
  • Short Story » Realistic, Narrative Re: The Station

    This is quite a different and unique way of writing. The way things are randomized is quite a weird thing to read, things that you wouldn't expect. "She has some ...

    Dec 16, 2012
  • Other » General, General Re: Pain

    This seems like quite a heartfelt thought. At first it seems literate and thought through. But by then end you are just speaking your mind. People are different, some more ...

    Nov 22, 2012
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Deleted 32

    I'll go in order. i. I really like this one, it speaks the truth and very poetically, I think its brilliant. I think it impacts me though because it has ...

    Nov 21, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Crossroads (Children shouldn't play here)

    Quite an impacting poem. I though the message was sent across clear enough and that it had a deeper meaning. I got the sense that the 2 characters were siblings, ...

    Nov 20, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: Writer's Block

    Very true for a start! I think the concept of having writers blocked is put across quite effectively to a certain extent. I liked the comparison of the twiddling of ...

    Nov 16, 2012
  • Poetry » Narrative, Dramatic Re: Broken Vessel

    I quite like this piece of writing. I like the comparison between anguish and love, showing how there may be a link between the 2 emotions. The imagery that came ...

    Nov 16, 2012
  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: Fondly, Ever After

    The opening sentence grabs your attention. It makes you think 'what is she/he hiding from?'. I can't seem to make sense of the 'love' and the 'honey'. I'm assuming that ...

    Nov 15, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Technology Re: The Great Eskmonian War (Prologue)

    This seems like the foreshadow of the war in Poland in World War 2. But with more depth. What I like about this is the description and the way you've ...

    Nov 14, 2012


It had a perfectly round door like a porthole, painted green, with a shiny yellow brass knob in the exact middle. The door opened on to a tube-shaped hall like a tunnel: a very comfortable tunnel without smoke, with panelled walls, and floors tiled and carpeted, provided with polished chairs, and lots and lots of pegs for hats and coats—the hobbit was fond of visitors. The tunnel wound on and on, going fairly but not quite straight into the side of the hill —The Hill, as all the people for many miles round called it—and many little round doors opened out of it, first on one side and then on another.
— JRR Tolkien