Skye

Okay, first off, I'll say that I liked this a lot, though I do have some points to bring up. I softly close my eyes I don't like "softly" in ...

My, what a large vocabulary! I like this. A lot. Like Chevy said, it's original and complexly simple (FYI, "complexly simple" is probably the best compliment I can give you). ...

That was really fabulous. Rap isn't my thing, but if more rap lyrics were like yours, I would definitely listen to it. You sound really good to, though some lines ...

"Big yellow brain"? Oh, dear... Other than that, it was fantabulously beautiful. "love is lust love is dust " My fave lines out of the whole thing. EDIT: I just ...

This is really awesome, and the ending really threw me. Overall, really awesome. It flows nicely, and I love the fact that there are no capitalizations. Maybe...I don't know, just ...

The faeries lifting me high I feel so secure For some reason, the spreading out of these lines doesn't feel "secure" to me, like I think you are trying to ...

Wow....this is really really good, and the feeling behind it is potent. One thing: I could not be true. I couldn't believe it, I wouldn't. Did you mean "It could ...

The first poem was better than the second. But I did not like the last two lines of the first, they were....they were just weird. In the second one, the ...

Or the frank vegetable scent of earth as we fumbled hands and knees hunting for the elusive four leaf clover? I absolutely love love love this stanza, it's the best ...

The jab cross to your nose makes something give way it bleeds a lot Your nose Your face is smeared with the stuff grotesque really The first line of this ...

I agree with most of the above. I think that "the way her eyes light up when she smiles" should be deleted. If you do delete it, you would need ...

Wow...I'm speechless. That was really, totally, completely, without a doubt beautiful. I agree with CAG77 in saying that some of the lines are awkwardly phrased, which does detract from the ...

So-so. I can relate to how she feels, though. Suggestion: The obtrusive blue apron tied tightly around her waste. Just a typo. I think you mean "waist". I like how ...

This was good! Very very good! Just one thing: I'm standing on the edge of all I know your name carved into my heart I wished I could say it ...

This was really good! The theme was cool, and a lot of the lines were really beautiful! The lights switched off, Staring at the computer screen, Waiting for your name ...