Samk642

:) I will!! I've read your first 2 chapters, and they are great!!!

Thanks so much!!!!!! I like, well.. Don't like, but am glad that you're willing to be to the point and clear in your review. I will take your review to ...

Samk642 here!!! I'm not going to try and write an essay on what you should do (doubt I could even if I tried) but I am going to say, *dramatic ...

Intriguing. I like it!

I like it!! It's funny!!

Ok!! Thanks!! Sorry, I was a tad confused. Great work!!

Although I was wrong in saying the first paragraph, I meant the beginning of second. I'm just a more blunt person. That's it

I am just used to a different type of opening, most of the time I like to open with a bit of opening narration from third person. But, you know, ...

Most wouldn't, I'm just a HUGE nerd on about everything nerdy, lotr, starward, the works!

No problem, believe it or not, I have grammar problems all the time with my work.

I can't wait to see it on here!!! (As we know each other in real life!)

Thank you, I will edit out the welcome and the Fallen are actually another species.

Wow, just.. wow...

Some things I would recommend to make your poem better IF you are going for a better rythym try to get the words to match line for line a bit ...

as petalstar said below, AMAZING!!!! this has lots of potential and i would love it if this might someday be turned into a book! Geronimo!!