Sam

I thought it was OK, but you need to be more descriptive. I like Greasy Hair, but especially the crystal needs some description. I was expecting this huge paragraph for ...

I thought this was really well written. The voice of the girl in the poem is so strong, you actually feel a bit sorry for her. That, my dear Wulie, ...

Ooo...yes! I agree with Nate, however, you have this bloody battle going on and you don't say anything about it, only 'there was a battle going on'. Which is painfully ...

I really liked this, even though it is rather short...one thing, though, that caught my eye- you describe really, really vividly, but you don't say anything about the little girl's ...

All I can say is...you have a very elegant writing style. It's very formal, perfect. And you have impeccable grammar. What more could a reader ask for? My only critique ...

Yes! I agree...you have great descriptive bits in this piece, like the amethyst eyes. You kind of lose it at the end, but if you just make it a bit ...

i'm sorry, Liz, but i can't crit these. There's too many of them and they all need some work, and it would take me forever. *realizes what she's said* i'll ...

this might be bisased but I don't especially like the rhyming for this type of poem. It sounds sort of cutesy, and this is about someone cutting themselves for fun, ...

I was really cool. Your descriptions are very vivid, and I like how the main character notices everything. Like the girl with the French braids and the guy behind the ...

again, firestarter, you're a great poet! I love the way, at the end of the second stanza, you stop and then finish the sentence at the beginning of the third...don't ...

This poem was OK...needs some revisions, though. :D I think you use the word 'you' a lot, and for this length of a poem, you don't describe 'you' enough. 'Waiting ...

*crying softly* OMG this is sooo cool...I love how it's like going from how you're like hopeless too looking for heaven...this is beautiful! (k, sam, find something to critique!) Gotta ...

I have to agree with him (darn you you take the words out of my mouth!) It's sort of vague and mysterious, which, for this poem, is a good thing. ...

aww...that's really recent, too. Anyways...most people when they write *ahem* RHYMING grief poems, they write some useless mass of forced-sadness GUNK...this poem isn't like that. And you don't tell u

OK I love the idea! My dad's a music professor at the University of Nebraska...needless to say, we're all into it! *lol* I'll crit hard...only 'cause I like it! "Hi. ...