Rurouni

Oh.. This is sad... Okay, firstly, remember to capitalize those i's! thay is they.... I think everyone finds this one way or another... And I think everyone goes through this ...

I smiled! lol Here I go.. okay, worls is world. someones is someone's I believe. And I'm sure you did your research, and a smile is priceless! It is so ...

Oh...... I think this is true for every writer in the word... I like this, and can't find anything wrong....... I like how you describe this problem (issue, whatever lol) ...

Ok. I like this.... It shows how one topic can be played over and over and over until it basically disappears.. I found one little thing, '“Don’t you are you’re ...

Ohh... I felt anger in this poem... I like how this goes back and forth, and I see this as something a lot of troubled teens should read... This is ...

Wow.. I liked this.. I would like some commas, as you have other punctuation, and it doesn't feel complete without the commas. Some commas after each stanza are nice, and ...

Alrighty... My first thing... CAPS!!! We need the capitals man! Maybe some punctuation too.... That might be nice. I really like this, and how the sky can mean so much ...

Ohh..... I nearly burst into tears! I do think that the speech should be in " ".. and maybe end the speech with punctuation, as it could use it. I ...

Ohh... This was sad... I see how this is true... 'The call him a bum, a useless piece trash,' should be, 'They call him a bum, a useless piece of ...

Ohh... This was interesting.. I get a sense of America in it almost... 'how vioence came to show' vioence is violence. 'cause is Because. I can't find much else I ...

Wow... Another moving poem by Ayden.... I liked this, and how I can feel your emotions... Though the end is a little... Confusing, I sense I understand the meaning.... I ...

I am sensing this is from Gee's workshop.... Rum and oranges... So, I like this, maybe some commas? I like 'drunken old birds sing' as that might have to do ...

Okay. Firstly: After a comma is a space, like so. So, make sure to fix those. Im is I'm. Crys is Cries. I understand the meaning, but I beleive there ...

Oh, I liked this! I like how you described death, as it's man.... And in the second stanza, I think you turned into death (No?) because you said, We are ...

Wow, this is very rhyming. I like it, at first, I though it was about Stars (U.S.A.) But you pleasantly surprised me with a fight between Stars and Lightning. I ...