Rosan

Hello there. There were a few things I noticed in this motivating piece of work. Firstly, in the line... "In fear you've come to late" It should have been "too" ...

I like how you made this piece.

This piece is beautiful, it had such a nice feel to it but somehow needs copy reading. _____________________________________________________________________ Here are the few errors I found throughout

Good job!

I don't really get why you use semicolons in all the third lines in each stanza. The capitalization and use of punctuation marks should be fixed. Good work on the ...

Hello there, I'll be the first to review your short story. Since this is really short compared to the other stories, I'll be going through each paragraph and some lines. ...

Good Job on this piece. I just don't understand what you were trying to say in the second sentence: "She tries her hardest to keep their secret, hence the word: ...

Just fix the spacing in between some words. That's all.

Great Work!

Okay... One thing I would like to point out is the spelling of exercises in "...Then they battled but scattycat won because he does daily pilates and core strengthening exercizes..." ...

Nice Work!

First of all, just like the last comment, cut it into stanzas so it would look like a poem. I'm guessing that the lines are separated by each comma so ...

Wow, this is great. Love it!

I have to agree with the previous comment. But either way, good job.

This is interesting.