I Never Forgot You, Ever

by TranscendingIllusion

Published April 25, 2013

E - Everyone

In Sorrow

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I Never Forgot You, Ever
 
I wish I could remember what I was like,
the way you used to compliment me.
When you told me your feelings;
for me.
 
I wish I could remember how you romanced me,
the songs you used to send.
Those blushing messages;
only for my eyes.
 
I wish I could remember why I said no,
when I said distance was too much.
Why I thought I could live;
without you.
 
I wish I could remember being happy,
seeing your smiling face.
Hearing your voice;
your eyes.
 
I wish I could remember our promises,
that you'd lock away half your heart.
And I'd give you the pieces I had left;
forever.
 
I wish I could remember  when you wanted me,
when I said that I would love you.
And you said you would;
i still would.
 
I wish I didn't have to remember feeling regret,
knowing that it was my mistake.
When you were there in front of me;
forgive me.
 
I wish I could remember a night where I didn't cry,
to wake up on a dry pillow.
I just don't know;
anymore;
Comments & reviews · 2
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paula08
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paula08 wrote a review Review · Apr 27, 2013

This is a direct poem which is easily understood. The endless sense of longing emerges in the poem with the repetition of "I wish I could remember". This makes the reader feel the despiration of the speaker and sympathise with her. The words you used build up an ideal romantic image which is broken down at the end. This shows the terrible state in which the speaker is.

I really loved this poem since it explores a very emotional situation of love and desperation. What a perfect combination!!

Keep it up!

Thank you so much for the review; its an amazing feeling when the reader understands completely what I am talking about in my poetry :)
Thanks again

You're welcome. :)

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Rosan
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Rosan wrote a review Review · Apr 25, 2013

I don't really get why you use semicolons in all the third lines in each stanza. The capitalization and use of punctuation marks should be fixed.
Good work on the message.

Sorry I
was meant to take out the capitalised words or the semicolons, and thank you :D



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