Wolfy Love Poem

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Hello There..........

I love that the poem?......gets right to the point. However it doesn't really look like a poem......more like a paragraph. Also the poem is all over the place. It is talking about to many things in its small structure. The use of figurative language is being OVER used in this. Now I know figurative language is good and all but this is just too much. I would not recommend taking it out but instead adding more lines to give a more fuller and not confusing effect. Good Luck!!

I absolutely adore this poem! Its so cute like its not that cute to give me a headache its just about the right amount of cute! Like you have simply converted the nursery rhyme of
Roses are red

Violets are blue

Sugar is sweet

And so are you! XD XD

So loovvveeellyy!
Ahem! Here theres norhing much to say as everything looks fine the way it is! I wiil pray that the black kitty gets her big bad wolf! Lol... anywys keep writing the cute stuff!! . ♥♥

Hi there, ShadowsKittykat (I wubbles your Tokyo Mew-Mew avatar btw)
^-^ And Happy Review Day c:
Anyhoo! on to the review,
"If roses are red and violets are blue,
Then why am I so very "much" attracted to you?"

Remove the word much above ^
And the second verse:

"I have fallen in love with a big strong wolf,
it might be just my luck that this kitten is the love of the big bad wolf,"

"big strong wolf" AND "big bad wolf" are too similar to be in the same stanza, making it read a bit roughly and appear to be inconsistent. And also, rather than "it might be just my luck", reword it to "it might just be my luck". That would be grammatically proper, if we're being picky lol

"how did I turn out so lucky(? insert question mark)
I'm a black cat who has never been so socially lucky,
I love my big bad wolf.
The word "lucky" is used twice in the same stanza, which throws it off.

The theme is very nice, and the title was sooo cute. It drew me in. But reading it, it was a bit "unfinished", in my opinion. This could be a sweet little poem with a bit of polishing. Maybe do some editing and you could even make it rhyme if you wanted, too :p

Anyhoo, lovely job aside form that. I look forward to reading more from you. Good luck with this piece. Do your best, and keep writing ^-^

~Catnip~

First of all, just like the last comment, cut it into stanzas so it would look like a poem. I'm guessing that the lines are separated by each comma so it would look like this:
(not sure about the stanzas though, sorry)

"If roses are red and violets are blue,
then why am I so very much attracted to you?
I have fallen in love with a big strong wolf,
it might be just my luck that this kitten is the love of the big bad wolf.
How did I turn out so lucky?
I'm a black cat who has never been so socially lucky.
I love my big bad wolf."

The numbers of lines in a stanza depends on you but I'll just group it into two.

"If roses are red and violets are blue
then why am I so very much attracted to you?"

This part is nice but doesn't hold much meaning.

"I have fallen in love with a big strong wolf,
it might be just my luck that this kitten is the love of the big bad wolf."

Try shortening the second line of this part.

"How did I turn out so lucky?
I'm a black cat who has never been so socially lucky.
I love my big bad wolf."

It isn't good to be using the same words so much especially if the poem is short like this.
The punctuation marks at the ends of each lines are just suggestions if in case you take this review seriously. Nice piece by the way.

Hi there!

I like this poem its sweet and sounds like something out of a fairy tale! its cute!

I think you need to work on the structure, right now it's a bit of a bulky paragraph so you need to put in into stanzas. To help you I'll give you an example for the first two lines:

"If roses are red and violets are blue,
Then why am I so very much attracted to you?"

Also sometimes it didn't flow as smoothly as the rest of the poem:

"I have fallen in love with a big strong wolf,
it might be just my luck that this kitten is the love of the big bad wolf"

You are repeating the words Love and Wolf to much and try to shorten the second stanza to make it flow better.

Overall I really liked this; sweet and quirky

Keep writing,

~*Annapurna*~