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This was really good Snoink. I like how we found out one thing at a time and how you didn't crowd it with information in the first sitting. The way ...

Wow! Bomb ending. There are so many different ends in which to love Ch. The pain, some happiness(lol), relationships, science and medical problems. Your reader is learning as they're reading ...

This was great Bubbles! I don't think I've ever read your poetry, but I love what I read. *As she walks to work, she catches a glimpse of that girl ...

He's going to betray Jon?! I don't think he can, can he? Jon is like the world to him right? And Ariel has no feeling for Jon or Kyle whatsoever? ...

This was really nice Bradness. I always love reading your poetry. One question though: It sounds like your narrator is getting ready to have someone over for dinner, for the ...

This poem has wonderful meaning but, there are some parts that can be taken out to make it better as well as some spelling errors. 1.Friends will come friends will ...

This flowed really well. I liked the dialect you used, it really...umphed up the poem I guess I should say. Though, I'm sensing mixed feelings throughout? I see that the ...

Poor Sarah! I actually kinda feel bad for her now. She almost got raped and now she's in France?! I swear I couldn't predict any of this even if I ...

Chooky, I think he means that Jon looked at Kyle when he didn't think Jon was looking." as in, "he" stands for Kyle. "Jon looked at Kyle when he didn't ...

You certainly know how to twist and turn a plot Brad. I mean, at first I was confused because even I was wondering...hasn't this happened before? But when I recognized ...

Omg. That was badass. When you said answers...I thought you were joking with me to be totally honest. Chionophobia is a secret agency? Sadly that means I was wrong when ...

Wow. Again, great ending. I wasn't too concerned about the agent part that Clau was talking about because, well we don't have to know where Jon is if Jon doesn't ...

Ah! That was fantasic. lol and funny, I can so relate to that. Sometimes I just want to throw my straightener to the wall and let my hair go wild ...

Oh my, not Bradness! lol this was really funny and from title I only had the slightest feeling that this was about Brad...sadly. And then throughout I was like: wow ...

Okay the first thing I noticed was that your format was off. Try to put spaces between your paragraphs as not to confuse your readers, that helps you to get ...