He came from nowhere, Incan did
From the murky depths of the sea.
A primitive brain with a primordial yearning
To eat all the poems he could see.
While slinking around in the foam of the waves
A storm blew him into this port
And when he saw the poems floating around
He treated poem-eating as sport.
Because the lonely poems taste bitter
And the love-y ones so sweet
But his favorites were the suicides
That tasted like red meat.
And smacking his lips after swallowing
He admits, "It wasn't quite so bad.
But now it's gone and thankfully so;
All the best --- Brad."
Oh my, not Bradness!
lol this was really funny and from title I only had the slightest feeling that this was about Brad...sadly. And then throughout I was like: wow nice rhyming. And then at the end I was like: Brad?! lol, really funny.
hahahaha
~Rieda
Hehehe... he's seen it, but he considers it a poem which is infected with AIDS, or gangrene, so it's not worth his time to comment, LMAO. 
When you left a link in my blog after I had had a ranting session about him this really cheered me up 
Its really captured him... lol.
And my favourite is the last line when you took his "motto" line......
All the best-Brad.
Excellent.
Hope he see's it
I think I've been away from the YWS too long to know exactly who you're talking about ... but it seems that Snoink has remained just as witty (if not moreso.) I liked all the sea imagery, like "murky depths" and "slinking around in the foam of the waves." Slinking is a great word, in general.
NICE WORK I HAVE NO CRIT!
Hahaha... that's wonderful.
The only suggestion I have is to change the rhymes in the first stanza... If you read it out loud, it just sounds like you're repeating "sea" twice.
Other than that... it's lovely.
Oh no! Metalhead posted the dreaded "N" word: "nice!" AAUGH!
LOL, Snoink! I love it!!!! Has Incan seen it yet? 
Oh....I love it. can you tell! That's Incan perfectly--totally loved it.
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