Raindeer

Hi, again! Happy Review Day (if I have not celebrated this wit you, yet:D) So. Just a pointer - the whole first half of the chapter, all the lines/paragraphs started ...

Hi, there! Happy Review Day. Sorry, I haven't read the first part, so pardon me if I accidently touch upon something that has happened/been done in the previous part. So! ...

Wow. This was breathtaking. So original. *ahem* Happy Review Day! Let's get this review started. :D I wanted to begin by - my oh my, what a splendid plot this ...

Hi! Happy Review Day! I haven't read the previous chapters, but I'll do my best to review this. So, I noticed you had a few run on sentences, for example: ...

Hi! Happy Review Day~ I'm going to start this off with nitpicks. "I won't leave, I promise" You need some sort of punctuation between promise and the quotation marks; either ...

Hi, Happy Review Day! Sorry about the blank comment below, I accidently clicked the 'submit' button. >.< Wow! So, I loved this. I loved it so much, I want more. ...

Hi. Happy Review Day. This was a very interesting poem, and I loved the metaphor feel to it. The fact that you introduced (not really introduced-but 'said' might be a ...

Hi, there! This was a nice poem - however, the ryhming wasn't consistent, and I think that's what threw me off. You have some of the same rhyming words used ...

Hi, hello. I'm marking this as a review, but I wouldn't really call it a "review". Mostly just answering your questions to the best of my ability. 1. Your best ...

Hello, there! I'm here for a quick review. :) So, this was a nice little piece, and very much enjoyable. I'm going to start with nitpicks. ^_^ Salty, cool, sweet, ...

Hello, there! To begin this review, I will start with nitpicks. When I land on the ground, two kids picked me up and made a giant snowball. It seems like ...

Hello. Yes, we all write random things. :D At least I do. Okay! So, you should squash a bunch of your mini paragraphs into a much larger one, unless you ...

Hello. I just want to suggest very quickly that you should consider breaking this in parts; one post for each chapter. That way, things can be a little more organized, ...

Oh. Wow. My favorite part of this piece was the last paragraph. Don't we all wish the world was like that? You described everything perfectly and in so much detail, ...

Hello! You're my 50th review! :D Ahem. So, before I even get into my review, might I suggest to go back and edit this. There were a lot of punctuation ...