OreosAreLife

This was a fairly good chapter. I like the way you had them undermine and defeat the six killers. You did a good job with this chapter and is was ...

Hey Ehtaniel! This was a great chapter. I liked how you went into more detail thought the battle. You did a great job I l and this chapter was better ...

Hey Keepwriting! His was a really amazing poem. The only thing I can see that is wrong is that all your lines rhyme except for the last two. Your flow ...

This was a good Prologue! I cannot wait to see what you have for the chapters! There is really nothing wrong with this. The start was really good and got ...

That was a great poem, I enjoyed the visual it brought with it. You have a talent for poetry and I like the transitions too. You did a wonderful job ...

Hey this is AshleyDashley, That was deep, it touched my heart! Your poem was really good and I felt their pain in missing them and their love for them too. ...

It is really very short so it is somewhat confusing as to the message you are trying to send. What do the word mean, if you could specify that would ...

Oh that was beautiful. The flow was great and really kept me wanting to read more. I could visualize what I was reading and it was cool. You are very ...

This was a beautiful poem. I Think that the flow was nice. One hing I would recommend though is that you should capitalize the first letter in each line. I ...

OH this poem was extraordinary. I could visualize every word. I got lost in the words. This made me eager for more the more I read and the way you ...

This poem shows a lot of emotion and it is kind of sad thinking about it. One thing you need it a flow so that your readers can get swept ...

This was a really good poem. It made me cry just think ng about it! It is so beautiful that I had everyone around me read it. I like how ...

The first line was really good and I can relate. But the betalking I really don't understand. I like how your describe how you feel. The flow though I don't ...

Throughout the poem my heart hammered. It was really good. I like how you described it. I could really see what was happening. I think you get a great picture ...

Your first chapter was really good at keeping me up to what was going on. You did a good job at keeping the story centered on the main character and ...