Noelle

Hi there! Um, did I miss something with this girl? I knew that she had been captured and called a witch, but I don't remember them actually finding her. Maybe ...

Hi there! Well, this chapter is starting off just as brilliantly as the last part of the last chapter. You seem to have kept up the intensity and the feeling ...

Hi there! I really like the addition of a new character here. It seems that you've been relying on the same x number of characters since the beginning. Which is ...

Hi there! First off, don't ever apologize for your chapters being too short. Or too long for that matter. You're the one writing the story. If the chapter needs to ...

Hi there! Noelle here for a Review Day review! "So are we gonna do this or not?" It's always good to have dialogue tags at the beginning of chapters. Because ...

Hi there! Noelle here for another Review Day review! Obi wished he could see her face Why can't he see her face? Did I miss something? Unless of course, he's ...

Hi there! Noelle here for a Review Day review! I apologize for not reviewing the past few chapters, but there was never anything for me to say. So I figured ...

Hi there! Noelle back for another Review Day review! I'm all caught up!! :D Until you post the next chapter tonight, but let's not think of that right now. Let ...

Hi there! Noelle here for another Review Day review! “Do you want to call attention to what we’re doing back here? Or this particular stack of boxes? They’ll forever associate ...

Hi there! Noelle here for a Review Day review! “Yes, I’m William.” This might just be a personal preference, but I would've liked to have seen a dialogue tag here. ...

Hi there! “Who’s ready to go see a studio?” a voice roared. When you say the voiced roared it made me think that the person was saying it angrily. Which ...

Hi there! I'm gonna start off with a nitpick cause I'm mean like that :3 When Fleta is telling the story, she's also telling us what Shep was saying. You ...

Hi there! Yessssss! Jay's decision to run away backfired on him. I knew that at one point his mother was going to say something and try to find him. Looks ...

Hi there! The whole scene in the beginning where they're trying to figure out who sleeps where is just too funny. I was laughing the whole time. Of course Fleta ...

Hi there! I really like how you described the different people on the train. I know I've been on you for doing that so it's nice to see :) Of ...