NeoAnderson

hey, i liked the idea of the poem. it was made in a very different manner which i liked. 1.i think you overused your hyphens. 2. i would have liked ...

wow! i really liked this poem. seriously, i did like it. i liked it bacause it had a really smooth flow, and the words you chose were simple yet efficient. ...

This poem was actually inspired by my bird's death, this morning You can throw me in a dirty pot; make me into a boiling stew; But the pain I give ...

ok, I know the rhyme scheme is messed up but I like it this way. It gives it a twist. I think this is about becoming a teenager, but truly, ...

Would you kiss me if I said I loved you? Would you hug if I said I cared? if I said I hate you would you shed a tear?( the ...

I lie here in this dreaming state. Too often had I tempted fate.( nice rhyming words) He came for me, dripping blood. A pointed finger, I understood.(i really loved these ...

Love is a malicious gift,(a great usage of words) Delicious torment,(cliche, but still good) A toxic kiss.(great) Love, from whence this poision drips,( good line) Destroys my will, My will ...

Rain has many voices, Those we cannot hear, Though when we truly listen, Whispers whislte with the wind.(the spelling is whistle) Though many cannot understand, Some have the heart to ...

Dear God, I hate my life, I'm forced to live with a man, who will not admit I'm his wife.(i think making will not to won't will improve the flow ...

im not sure how to title, i wasn't really sure how to finish it; so i just left it. untitled Nothing means anything, No maker of sense. The trader of ...

You are nothing but a fairytale Is fiction not a crime? A gripping tale of courage, Your lies are like a chime. If you where as noble,(were) As your caracter ...

When I look up at the stars, I just don't see little lights. I see a would of possibilities, (would should be world) That can take flight.( beautiful) I know ...

this is a good poem but it can be improved 1. i think the lines were too short. 2. the topic you have picked is amazing. 3. i think you ...

it was an OK poem. the subject is interesting but this poem can be improved on 1. you used the word series in the second line. it doesn't make sense. ...