Nate

A fitting poem for the time :) It hasn't gotten quite that bad yet on my campus, but it soon will be. Finals begin on Monday, but that sense of ...

Avoid using words like "to" as in "to melt away soft cotton." The line works better as "melting away soft cotton." In the third stanza, third line, changed "pressed" to ...

Short but sweet. I'd suggest, though, adding in a line between the end of the poem and the dedication. And since I'm not sure if everyone here knows what Columbine ...

I like the metaphor here and the way you employed it in the poem. The ending is really good too; it serves to point out a good moral. There was ...

I love this! Especially since this is exactly how finals week is. You have that one, special hour of the day when you can actually play your stereo or turn ...

The ending was kinda corny, but I loved the rest of the story. It was very folk-talish and it definitely captivating to read. I felt myself drawn to it as ...

I really thought I had commented on this long ago... guess not. It's a good story, but it needs more. Right now, I don't care about the brothers, and I ...

*bump* forgive me!! *shakes fist* I'll forgive you this time! :D It's quite alright actually; I do it all the time ;) I really liked this. The one thing that ...

I really liked it; the repitition of certain words was done well and you have a nice flow going throughout. I also like how it can be adopted to either ...

I liked it... your style really makes the point of the girl being rushed. The internal questioning also really serves to impress on the reader a feeling of helplessness within ...

Some of your lines are really good, such as "A butterfly suspended on a petal." It says a lot without being verbose. The poem as a whole definitely brings about ...

I like the idea of the story and you develop it pretty well, but it needs more fleshing out. This is actually something that could easily be ten, twenty pages. ...

Lol, good job. Definitely humorous with real style! Not sure if "crumby" is spelled correctly though; I think it's crummy or something like that, but I'm not sure. Also, be ...

I really liked this. The past is viewed abstractly, yet with a definite personal quality; it almost comes off as sounding personified. However, you need to go through and grammar ...

Wow... This is excellent. Your structure and descriptions are flawless, and there are so many lines here that are just plain awesome; my favorite being "in the twilight shadows of ...