The Box

Hello! It’s CATS HERE to review this very fun poem! Let’s dive in, shall we, my friend??
This is a very unique way of poetry, if that’s how you put it. I love the rhyming too!
This talks about how the narrator feels so lonely and left out of the popular kids. They don’t have to be popular and act weird just because they want to join. And even if you do, you still feel like you don’t belong!
This is a chillingly true poem message about life. It gave me shivers of pleasure. It is so creative and unique, and the tile makes the reader curious!
Overall I loved this and I hope you write more soon!
Happy Reading Happy Writing Happy RevMo And Happy Poetry!!!
Love,
CATS

Hop here with a review. Please excuse my yapping and why this review is so long is mainly that. But let's get into the review ~~~~

This poem is mysterious but like in a really cool way? You’re like talking about something like a box but it’s not a box at all. It’s more like a feeling if that makes any sense??? The first line No Box Exists In Life just kinda pulls the reader in. It sets up this like idea that the box isn’t real but it still affects everything

Overall this poem feels like a metaphor for social pressure or self doubt or maybe even identity. You’re not trying to explain everything you’re just putting the feeling out there and letting it speak for itself. It's like short but it still like hits all the emotions it's trying to

Stay amazing! Keep writing! And Happy Review Month! (OMG MY 75TH REVIEW!!!)

Love,
Hop

Not bad, but maybe a little too literal. The line "between me and the popular kids" invokes Snacky's law and also makes the poem a little restrictive. Maybe its just what separates you from "them" - whoever "they" may be; this would allow people to interpret it differently, and I think it would make the poem itself a lot more powerful and transcendent.

Also, I'd change the line "I try to break it" to "I try to break through." Again, it's just a more powerful way of expressing yourself.

I second GingerLizzy's suggestion; expand on the popular kids parading in front of you. What do they do that you think is better than what you do? Is it the way their hair is just so, or they have the "right" clothes or accessories? What is it that you think stops you from being like them - tell us! (This goes against my earlier advice to make it more transcendent, and the wonderful thing about critiques is that you can pick and choose which advice to take.)

I liked this but maybe you have put your point across about you being worlds apart from the popular kids too straight forward? You could perhaps somehow describe their hair and facial features, saying how perhaps they are beautiful but in an ugly way?

Other than that, I like the concept and thought it was quite clever. Good work.

Well, I had a difficult time understanding and keeping up--there seemed to be so many subjects and so much meaning in just these few short lines. Not to say I didn't enjoy it, because it was worded rather beautifully, I'm just not so sure I really picked up on a steady concept. But hey, what can you say for an eleven year old--exceptional work for your age.

okay, like what words, cause reading it, I see what you mean.

I really like your metaphor and the sentiment behind your poem. The only way I can see you improving this is by pulling back a little and letting it flow better by taking out some of the unneccesary words.

I like the metaphor here and the way you employed it in the poem. The ending is really good too; it serves to point out a good moral. There was one spelling mistake, "invisable" should be "invisible," but otherwise, not much of a problem here in regards to grammar.

Overall, good poem.