Nargles

Hey, Firstly welcome to YWS, I hope you enjoy your stay :) Secondly I'm going to have a shot at reviewing this poem. Ok, so I can see where you ...

Ok, firstly hi and welcome to YWS. Secondly I'm going have a crack at reviewing your poem (hopefully it will be of some help). I like this poem and where ...

Wow! I truly love this, it is so moving and I had goosebumps by the end of this. I feel the sense of longing and lose in this poem, the ...

Ok so firstly WOW! This poem is rather full on and full of emotion. I can see clearly what's happening in my head and it was really sad and heartelt. ...

Wow! I love this poem, it is sweet and inspiring and sad all at the same time. It has some great imagery and description and flows beautifully. 'Don't fall asleep ...

I really like this poem. It is good, to the point and has a great flow. My favourite part was the ending, to me it shows how easy it is ...

Hey, Nargles here to review your wonderful work today! Firstly this is great. I love the idea and thought behind it, I feel as if you have a great message ...

Hey, I actually really enjoyed this poem. It was very very good actually. You have some great imagery in it which wasn't forced at all. One thing that annoys me ...

Hey, Ok so firstly i'll start with the good. 1. You have a very clear idea of what it is about which is good. It means you can improve on ...

I loved this. Yes there are things that could be improved but I think it is still fantastic without it. It is very truthful I think and that's why it's ...

Ok, Firstly, you really need to watch your grammar and spelling. Just because it's poetry doesn't mean you don't need need to follow the basic rules of grammar. So put ...

Hey, So this is good, it is short and could easily be worked on, but it is also good just as it is. I think you could change the last ...

Ok firstly welcome to YWS. Secondly this story isn't bad. You need to work on this chapter a lot more, it is to short and doesn't really give much info ...

Hey ok so firstly the layout needs to be changed. It is to hard to follow and should be in more of a poem structure. It will simply make for ...

Ok here to review, This is really intense, and really powerful. I feel as if you were really angry when you wrote this and just wanted to get it out. ...