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Re: No More
The Messenger Knight here to review your work for KotGR. Let's see what you got.:) No more avoiding the dark alleys No more running away from the shadows No more ...
Oct 16, 2013 -
Re: A Collection of Haiku
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. So, I really liked this compilation, although fortis is right about the switch from beautiful nature, to all of a sudden these ...
Oct 14, 2013 -
Re: Days of Gold Gone By: Ep.Three
the Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. first off lemme say Yay! for episode three, I am really enjoying this story. Behind the hall is a puddle of light, ...
Oct 14, 2013 -
Re: Drips of Blood
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. So, I thought this was very beautifully written, and great description/imagery. But I think you need to be more descriptive in telling ...
Oct 14, 2013 -
Re: When My Life Took A Sudden Turn.
the Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. And made me feel no special. I never showed off;My talent nor skill. Everyone has one, we all know, Until someone recognized ...
Oct 11, 2013 -
Re: My story.
The Messenger Knight here to review. So, I really, really, really liked this story/ life experience, but you had some big errors. 1. You have "i" all over the place, ...
Oct 11, 2013 -
Re: Start to a story - Nature's Finest
The Messenger Knight, here to review for KotGr. Julian sat admiring his Fathers blade; he admired the beautiful bronze hilt, This can be something you miss when writing, but using ...
Oct 10, 2013 -
Re: my story-baby dragons
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. Well first off welcome to YWS, and hope you enjoy it bunches. Now, for your review. If dark lord is a character, ...
Oct 10, 2013 -
Re: What You've Done
The Messenger Knight here to review for you, and the KotGR> So, you got a small typo here:) in this cacophony, this vale Vale should be veil. I'm treading waters ...
Oct 10, 2013 -
Re: Disjointed Entanglements
The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR. So I really liked this poem, and how you described words. Your description was beautiful, and the opposites Example on my dry ...
Oct 10, 2013 -
Re: A Stroll Amidst Seasons
The Knight Messenger here to review for KotGR. Man, I loved that first line. It so perfectly describes a writer. Now, onto the review. His footsteps, self taught to relative ...
Oct 10, 2013 -
Re: Chapter 1: Encounter
The Knight Messenger here to review for KotGR. The girl stood there on the ramp, I love this whole line, but I think taking away the word, there, would help. ...
Oct 9, 2013 -
Re: Lesser Being Prologue
The Knight Messenger here to review for Knights of the Green Room. So, I believe that the first part of this chapter, the part before the date, should be a ...
Oct 9, 2013 -
Re: Adventures of the Pokemon Journalist - Chapter 1 Part 1
The Knight Messenger here to review for KotGR. So Lucy is eight, and . . . whoa! The chapter is over. So, I like short chapters, but this was too ...
Oct 9, 2013 -
Re: Overcrowding in the Hawks Nest
The Knight Messenger here to review for KotGR. So, first off I would put this into a couple smaller paragraphs, because a big clump like this is hard to read. ...
Oct 9, 2013