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Re: Pillboxed 1 (16+)
Hey there, Hannah! First of all, I adore your prose. It's very poetic, but not in an overbearing way! There were a few places where it got hard to understand ...
Feb 1, 2013 -
Re: Just One More (2/2)
Stella! How did I not know you posted more of this? You know I can't resist! Anyways, I really like what you're doing with Charlie and Gen here. I like ...
Jan 19, 2013 -
Re: Creation of Estrellan
Hi Soul! :D So I know you're not finished with this, but I love worlbuilding and legends and creations and so I thought I'd leave my thoughts/suggestions/advice for how you ...
Jan 19, 2013 -
Re: The First Step.....
Hi BookLover! This is a sweet little story! I like the sentiment a lot, of meeting the person you might spend the rest of you life with in someplace as ...
Jan 19, 2013 -
Re: The Space Bar
It's that story! :D This, as is all your stuff, was a pleasure to read! The setting was really clear and well-formed, and I loved all the little humor in ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: Don't Know Her Like I Do
Hey Shelby! I'm Lauren and I'll be reviewing for you today :3 Since you have multiple chapters here, I'm going to break it all down by each chapter individually, and ...
Dec 30, 2012 -
Re: Studies of Human Affection
Hi there Antonio! I'm Lauren and I'll be reviewing for you today. :3 Since you have to poems, I'll separate my comments by poem: Pretty Brown Cats I quite liked ...
Dec 28, 2012 -
Re: Into the Depths (1)
Ellie! :) Here as requested! Like I said, I'm so thrilled to see you going back to this story. I remember you working on it almost as long as I've ...
Dec 28, 2012 -
Re: Four Days to Live
Hi TinyDancer! I really enjoyed this poem! You have some really good phrases and imagery going on here, which works well to support the ideas you're putting forth in the ...
Dec 21, 2012 -
Re: Christmas Poem
Hi KatherineHope! I see you're new here to YWS, so welcome! I hope you love it here as much as we all do, and stick around! This poem is really ...
Dec 21, 2012 -
Re: Maybe Not Just A Scratch
Hi creativityrules! I really enjoyed this poem! I like how you take the subject matter - someone cutting themselves - and present it in a way very unlike how cutting ...
Dec 21, 2012 -
Re: No Need for Alarm
Hi musingsmutterings! I see you're new here to YWS, so welcome! I hope you really enjoy it here, and stick around for a long time! You're obviously a very talented ...
Dec 19, 2012 -
Re: The Dialogue of a Star
Hi there WaitingForLife! :D This was...something! I'm still trying to wrap my head around it, to be honest. I like the sort of stream-of-consciousness element of two people star-gazing and ...
Dec 13, 2012 -
Re: Trapped
Hey there abullah! Lauren here for a review! :D Nitpicks! There were chains all around her, tight chains which nearly strangl ing ed her. They covered every inch of her ...
Sep 1, 2012 -
Re: Crazy Minds
Hey BlueHeart! Lauren here for a review! This is a really interesting dynamic you have going here between Mika and Edward! I like it a lot, and it's different than ...
Sep 1, 2012