KatTrain

Summer time The sky is as blue as the seas in Greece add a comma here Everyone seems to be doing fine add a period here People are joyful and ...

Eyes of daggers hiding the truth seems to me that 'eyes of daggers' are pretty blunt and honest Tongues of forked, charismatically smooth edges ooo nice, smooth imagery That drip ...

Oh, how happy I am To witness another magical night On in the emerald green woods Where the nightingale would sing A lament on for/in my ears add a comma ...

This is J j ust to say add comma I've lost that something in the rain and pouring hail period Somebody please help me find I reworked the line structure ...

It's all about stuff. What you can see . comma What you can touch . comma Everything worth anything comma condensed. Aside from the punctuation, outstanding first stanza. It's the ...

This feeling I can't ignore This is a really cliche beginning. It fits and works well but it really isn't as original as you'd want to be, you know? Also, ...

I wish I was beautiful-- *were Passionate words rolling from my lips like venom, Words =/= beauty Cheeks smoothed with blush. A smile plastered to my face, Contorted and wretched. ...

Can you catch a falling star in your hand? Can your thin fingers keep a hold of the grains of sand? Can you stop the hate that runs in our ...

Standing on the side walk, I noticed a dozen cars parked in front of her house. I guess this party’s huge, like really huge . I liked this a lot. ...

I'm going to re-work the lines I want to know if you meant it, I’ve thought about it countless times. I used to look at it all the time; dont ...

Beauty, pity your broken soul, Venture not in a month so cold. The December winds will chill your bones, Great first three lines ‘Til heart and blood be made of ...

I yearn for a love so divine, That my maker would one day be mine. I want your body, I want your blood. You're talking about God being your lover.... ...

Trust. comma instead A funny Five letter word You blew mine away Like dust period My world has I dislike this choppy line structure Been held by many But by ...

I used to hate you for the words you said that night, in that confusing mix of flesh and sweat and alcohol they call El Divino (and no, that is ...

Untitled I don't think about you day and night. I don't want to write a million tiny poems about you. You don't haunt my dreams and You're not beautiful. I ...