Can you catch a falling star in your hand?
Can your thin fingers keep a hold of the grains of sand?
Can you stop the hate that runs in our veins?
Can your words and actions stop the pains?
If you stop and listen, can you really hear?
If I hold your hand, can I remove the fear?
If we stand here together, can we make a difference?
If we quiet our thoughts, can we hear the truth in the silence?
Together, you and I, can we vanquish the hate?
I believe our peace is possible, if we only sit and wait.
Hello, Kuroi. I must apologize, but I can't critique it to shreds! This was nicely done, though we all know one can improve always. I'm just not sure how I can help you with this one. I'm just a reader now that would like to tell the writer that: I love the rhythm, the rhymes, the words used were great! I liked the style: using questions all throughout except for the last line to add punch. Nice, nice! =) Keep writing! Sorry I couldn't have been much more help with this one. But I do hope you keep on posting!
Jash ♥
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