Junel

Hey there friend! So... it begins. First off, this is a great start! I usually hate long things of description seeing them as unnecessary and something just plain wordy, but ...

Hey there! This is a very interesting start to your story. First off, I agree with Elinor that you could move the line Today I wish I should not have ...

Hey there! Woah to starting off in a weird, but none the less amazing way. You really accomplished your goal and made me start thinking. You introduce your fantasy aspects ...

Hey there! I really have enjoyed reading this, it's a great concept and I love how you have put it together. First the criticism. The first thing I noticed is ...

Hey there! This was perfectly short and sweet, with a lot of meaning, but grammatically it still has a way to go. I saw that previous you had too many ...

Hey there! This is a great start to your story! First off as soon as I opened this the first thing I thought was 'Oh, wow that's a long paragraph ...

Hey there! I try to not review things unless I've read the beginning, but I'm making an exception today. I did try to skim your previous chapters, but if I ...

Hey there I really enjoyed your poem and found it to be very impactful to me. First off I wanted to point out a spelling mistake so you can fix ...

Hey, there this is a very short, but also very interesting poem and I enjoyed it. (That's saying a lot since I tend to avoid poetry.) Your poem quickly moves ...

Hey there, I enjoyed reading this! First I have to say yikes there are some VERY long paragraphs in here, you really should split them up. Having such long paragraphs ...

Hey there, this is really amazing (I hit enter too quickly last time and it submitted my comment oops) Your short story is a perfect length and for that length, ...

Hey there! This is a good beginning and I can see that it is probably going to lead somewhere very interesting. So as the past two reviewers said you do ...

Hey, wow great job, because of how close you are to being finished with this, I'm going to try and be a bit nitpicky as I review, so that's my ...

Hey, there! Normally when reviewing chapters that aren't the first I try and read previous ones or the first chapter, but as its review day, I'm not today. So if ...

Hey there, so this is only a single paragraph, but that doesn't mean it's not very intriguing, but it does leave the reader wondering for some more information. First off ...