I'm just ME and you're just You
The one and only Me
Cannot be less,can't be more, can't be enough
Im Me, big smiling outgoing Me
Confused numbed Me
Depressed trapped Me
Can You help Me?
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Hey, there this is a very short, but also very interesting poem and I enjoyed it. (That's saying a lot since I tend to avoid poetry.)
Your poem quickly moves to a somber tone and it's you have chosen your vocabulary sparingly, but perfectly. I really like how you capitalized me, it strengthens your idea and your poem a ton. I can't help but wonder what inspired you to write this. Also, what is it the purpose of the backward title, it's really cool by the way, but you don't give any explanation as to why you did that in your poem.
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There needs to be a space added in here.
I hope that this review is helpful to you and continue writing!
Sláinte -Junel
Hey there Kat here for a short review!
First and foremost welcome to YWS I hope you stick around! I have been here for almost 8 years and I really love it. That Aside, I'm a huge fan of short poetry because I am really lazy and I also find it generally more impactful. It's important to keep in mind that certain ideas however should be expended upon. I don't understand the point for the backwards title. I really liked how you capitalized me to bring emphasis to it and and I feel like the person in this poem can be followed from a life of happiness to a life of sadness in just a few lines. As a reader I can't help but wonder why though. Is it heart break or general loss? Insanity perhaps or just general discontentment with self? This hit home for me because I feel like I'm tearing apart someone in my life right now and changing him from happy to depressed and I couldn't help but feel like this poem was about something similar.