IncohesiveScribbles

Hello b00kthi3f, This poem is beauty and tragedy all wrapped up in one. I love how you never mention death's name but it is obvious who it is. Shtoobie might ...

Hello Hermione315, I love this poem so much! It has wonderful imagery, the high wire and the wind being the one you love. The only minor changes I would make ...

Hello Masquerad3, I really like this story idea, and I feel if is carried out well it could make an amazing story. Everything in this first chapter is good content. ...

Hello Theironnovelist, I like this poem. It is very dramatic from the beginning to the end. It does irk me though that you left out capitals at the beginning of ...

Hi Forestqueen808, I like this poem. It has a certain mystery to it that's just appealing. The ending however seems off. I'm not sure what you mean from about the ...

Hi Anshira, This is a beautiful poem. It completely captures all that love is, was, and ever will be. In the fourth stanza the rhyme scheme is slightly deterred by ...

Hello AdelVise, This is an amazing poem! Like Laelle said, this would make a beautiful song. The only thing I'm not sure about is when you wrote "A violon leaving ...

Hi Deanie, I enjoy this poem! The symbol of foxes slipping out of reach like thoughts from our brain is really powerful. I especially like the ending where you make ...

Hi Sothisonekidwrites, This is a really interesting short story. I hope you expand it into a larger short story or a full blown novel. I want to know what the ...

Hello Queen Anne, This is a very powerful poem. I like how it shows even though you want to just curl up and make it all stop, life keeps you ...

Hello Pickled Chrissy, I connect with this poem on a spiritual level. Especially the first two stanzas. There's really nothing I can say that hasn't already been said for critiquing. ...

Hi Raver, This is a really interesting poem. I realize that it's supposed to be about the DC characters, but it might be interesting if you changed Harley to "she" ...

Hello Bambi, This is an awesome poem! I love the ending saying you've fallen out of love. The last line just stops the poem in such a dramatic way it's ...

I really like this extended metaphor. I like the imagery of the little devils tripping the people in the house. The last line is also very powerful, like a message ...

I like the symmetry of this piece. The three peaceful, but, then three chaotic. Space has always intrigued me and this poem is a beautiful capture of it's ferocity. Space ...