Fireweed

This was okay. Kind of a fun read, I guess... as a lighthearted poem,this is fine, but good poetry needs meaning and imagery and metaphors and all that good stuff, ...

Overall, I liked this alot. I really like the storyline, and you're imagery is lovely. However, the rhyme really needs work, try to make it more consistent. Some stanzas rhymed ...

Hmm... I liked it, it was interesting. It didn't really really move me or anything, but it was good. It's true that it's a message we've heard many times before, ...

I like it very much. It flows so beautifully and I like the way it repeats. The first 3 lines are especially pretty. :) My only suggestion is that you ...

1.Harry, though he annoys me a bit when he's being angsty, like Elelel said. 2.Voldemort... again I agree with Elelel. 3.Tie, I like the writing styles of both. 4.Harry Potter, ...

A bit morbid... That's not neccasarily bad, just not really my taste... The imagery is good, but this doesn't really have any discernable meaning. It seems like random images with ...

Brilliant. A totally original perspective on playing music. It flows beautifully and the descriptions are simply lovely. I agree that the term "tone holes" seems rather out of place since ...

This was a little too repetetive. I understand that the poem's structure was to begin each stanza "Cat green eyes," but it got a little tiresome. This was kind of ...

Gah... You got the Sound of Music song stuck in my head! *hums* Anyway, this poem has lovely imagery. Autumn is my favorite season.:) This is a bit cliche, like ...

Interesting. The beginning is pretty melodramatic, but this is well-written with very vivid description. The first sentence is pretty awkward sounding. Try to make it flow a bit more smoothly, ...

I'd have to agree with Dream Deep... The imagery is pretty, but this poem doesn't really have much meaning... It's hard to tell what you're trying to convey. I don't ...

This seemed very heartfelt. It flowed well and had strong imagery. If you make the revisions that people have suggested, I think it's likely you could get this published. There's ...

I liked this, it had some really awesome imagery. I liked the lines about geishas. But like Pandora said, it seemed a bit lacking in meaning, or perhaps I just ...

Hilarious. Bizarre, but hilarious. :lol: :mrgreen: :lol: :mrgreen: :lol:

Hmm... The rhyme was pretty forced, and all the two-line stanzas kind of annoyed me. They got too repetetive. See if you can make some variation in the structure of ...