Dreamworx95

Hello TBird, This is a pretty good prose/narrative poem. The images of the forbidden forest, the snake, and the realm of Hades lends to some intriguing mystical and spiritual tones. ...

Hi HnM, Very visual sort of prose poem here. I really like the last line. For me personally, the theme is a bit overdone, but there are some nice images ...

Hi Blue, I'm so glad I get to critique you! I love that the title of the poem is also sort of the opener, flowing right into the first line. ...

Hi Aley, This is a great poem about the cycle of life and death. It's interesting the role the narrator plays here, the gardener tending to the soil understanding that ...

You said read it, so I'm reading it! This is a very vulnerable, emotionally raw poem. Some images I thought were powerful: "you look at me every day as if ...

Hello EKK15, thanks for sharing your work with us. This is a really intriguing prose poem. The images you render are vivid and sensory. I can really feel and taste ...

Hello cub, I am just going to dive right in. "It was six in the morning on March fifth when they said that Haruto was missing." Try instead: "Haruto went ...

Hello sassybeatch, This preface has me in mind of Twilight for some reason. "It becomes as easy as breathing" - cut "becomes" and instead try: "It's as easy as breathing." ...

This is a very atmospheric and sensory piece. I love how it touches on all 5 senses, sight, sound, touch, smell, taste. A lot of really good lines in this ...

Interesting poem. There are many lines that really strike me. "I would sign deeds before their scrolls uncurled" and "we are all the victims still unaware" The rhyming seems to ...

Gosh, what a sad poem! Pain is unavoidable, it's true, and most of us learn to cope. We have to. The suffering undeniable, just part of the human condition. Yes, ...

Hi Shima, There is a period after "So, going out tonight?" that shouldn't be there. Should be: "So, going out tonight?" ---> [New paragraph] "He turned around on his large, ...

Interesting piece and intriguing title. The tone of the narrator doesn't quite sound defeated despite the title of the poem. Some of the lines are overly dramatic, as if the ...

This poem is so dreamy and gives me a drunk kind of feeling. Has me in mind of the Persian poets of love, like Rumi and Hafez. The structure of ...

I love this! Such a cool poem. I love how you played around with the fonts of certain words. "c r u m b l e d" and "shuddered" and ...