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Re: Chapter 2 (END)
Hello! Happy September Review Day! I'm going to write down any nitpicks I find as I read so sorry if I pick on something that would have made sense if ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Partial Shade & Partial Sunlight- Chapter 1
Hello to you and Happy September Review Day!! I'll just pick up on any nitpicks that I find, so here goes! "There had been rumor of a new guy in ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Descedants of Aphrodite and Hephaestus
Hello! I'm just wondering if this is a short story or a chapter in a novel? Anyway, Happy September Review Day!! "Airiel sits in her Mythical culture class listening barely ...
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Re: Monachopsis | Chapter One: The Fall (2/2)
Hey! I'm back to review part 2. :) Percy is a girl? :P I didn't expect that. Is it a nickname? Her eyes felt like melting; for a moment, she ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Monachopsis | Chapter One: The Fall (1/2)
Hello and Happy September Review Day!!! Okay, I review as I read. So sorry if I say something that would make sense if I'd kept reading. Anyway, allons-y ! Perching ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: A Word to Keep
Happy September Review Day!! I really like the first line. It's loud and fun. "Wondering it’s true or her little dream." I think you forgot the 'if'. If you left ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Negative Creep
Happy September Review Day!! I'll cut myself to make you bleed After all I'm his majesty's seed, Come to go but you know I am a sadist and a masochist ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: My Life Burden by Sean McMahon
Happy September Review Day! When I first look at this, I notice that there are not any paragraphs. There really needs to be some. I've put an explanation of paragraphs ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Camp Enemy Ch.2
Happy September Review Day!!! I love the cover picture you have, not many people choose to do that and it looks great! Ash covered the landscape, withering black roots pushed ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: The O'l Vanigan- Prologue.
Dreams! I love it when people write stories based on their dreams. And thank you for not making it like Twilight, that fandom irritates me. No offence to the people ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Scion of the Moon: Chapter 2: The Pilgrimage
Hello! I'll just write my thoughts and any errors I find as I read . So sorry if I pick on something that would make sense if I read further. ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Meet the Family
Heya! I'll review as I read and type down any thoughts or errors I find. :) Not giving them our names in the first paragraph was a good move. I ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: ..
This is pretty amazing. Everyone views Cupid as a romantic figure, and you've perfectly described the reality. Your wording is brilliant and it flows well. Unholy terror falls upon the ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: A short tale for Christmas (edited, yet not all mistakes corrected)
Hello! Christmas isn't very far away. Exciting, hey? Anyway, I better begin reviewing. I'm going to write down every little nitpick that comes into mind while I read this. Don't ...
Sep 28, 2014 -
Re: Prologue and Chp1
Hello! I really like your story, especially the friendships in it. You just need to watch out for a few mistakes. I think that Duncan has covered it all quite ...
Sep 28, 2014