ChocolateCello

Hey! ChocolateCello here! Welcome to the site! So I'm a little 'reviewed out' with review day just ending and all, but I'll give it a go. The story in this ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here! This was really cute. It couldn't help but smile. I really liked the simplicity of it. You keep the words plain, no adjectives, and it left the ...

Hey! Cello here! Two minor things "...saw my father aggressively holding..." I feel like 'aggressively' is the wrong word here. Maybe just taking out the adjective altogether here would work ...

Hey! Cello here! Happy review day! Ahh so I keep looking through your works and I've never been disappointed, you're a great writer. This poem though, I especially enjoyed. It's ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here! So I really don't feel the need to edit this because it was clearly written from the heart. You did a great job showing the struggles, the ...

I really loved this. Your words were the definition of beauty, tying together into a magnificent story. Every sentence was filled with an abundance of emotion and it really reflected ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here! Happy review day! I don't have a lot to say, as this poem was rather short, but let's start. The first two lines were great, everything felt ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here! Happy review day! This poem was really beautiful. The emotion and guild came across amazingly and I couldn't help but feel like I had done something wrong. ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here! Okay, so I've only gotten a chance to skin the previous two reviews but they seem to have covered content pretty well (Correct me if I'm wrong) ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here (Again)! Happy review day! This poem was fantastic. Your descriptions were beautiful, really pulling the reader in and adding to the atmosphere. I could practically hear the ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here! I really liked this, it was chilling and told a very interesting story. Minor things, not involving content, maybe put less space between your paragraphs and indent ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here! Happy review day! Okay, so over all this was a great poem. I just have two suggestions. When everything seemed Like everything was alright. You say everything ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here. Okay, so the edits I would like to make are very general. You put a lot of detail into your writing. Detail is good, but make sure ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here. I really loved the meaning in this. 'A skeptical boy on Christmas day'. He takes this day of spirit and fun and makes it about himself. His ...

Hey! ChocolateCello here! Okay, so you posted this quite awhile back, I don't usually review things more that a week old unless they're in the green room, but I thought ...