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  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: (verb) to give up for the sake of a better cause

    'Ello, its Cello, here for a likely short review (seeing as your work is simply fifteen words long ;) ) When it comes to content, there was only one thing ...

    Jul 22, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: my writer's anorexia.

    'Ello, it's Cello. Let me simply say I completely agree with silverhanded. Anorexia is not something to be taken lightly. I could go on to describe why but they already ...

    Jul 12, 2016
  • Poetry » Politics, Lyrical Re: Semi-Automatic Mouth

    'Ello, it's cello! For this review, I'd like to focus on your rhyming. (I would like to mention that I'm writing on a phone in a moving car so my ...

    Jul 4, 2016
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Literature Re: Have It In You

    'Ello, it's Cello, here to review! Let me start by saying that the thing I noticed most was your lack of commas. There were so many places that commas were ...

    Jul 2, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Technology, General Re: The Terrible Youth of Freznel: 29

    'Ello, it's Cello! To be honest, I have not read any of the chapters before this one so it will be hard for me to make notes on character or ...

    Jun 26, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Cold

    'Ello, it's Cello! Happy review day! Let's just jump in~ Cold, so cold, Like a Winter's day, Snowflakes in my heart, Forever there to stay. I feel like your first ...

    Jun 26, 2016
  • Poetry » General, Dramatic Re: The Whole World Became a Gay!!!

    'Ello, it's Cello, the queer police here. I'd like to start out by fully acknowledging that this is a joke and to be honest, I'm all up for queer based ...

    Jun 20, 2016
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Horror Re: Palaver

    'Ello, it's Cello, here to get into some editing of this poem. Let's jump in. Do it, he said I looked away, told him I can't I emptied my glass, ...

    Jun 5, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Narrative Re: Absence

    Sleep deprived Cello here to review~ I'm not one for introductions. Let's just get to it. I am the marmalade that you so carelessly spread across whichever bread pleases you. ...

    May 30, 2016
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Horror Re: There’s a canker in my brain

    'Ello, it's Cello here to review! Happy review day! Usually I focus on many things in a review but I'd rather just talk to you about rhyme scheme and stanzas. ...

    May 29, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Joy Ride

    'Ello, it's Cello here to review! I'm going to start out in the worst way possible- with a nitpick. Crrrrrrrrr.... An ellipse (the '...') should only ever have three dots. ...

    May 29, 2016
  • Poetry » Politics, Realistic Re: Friday Uprising

    'Ello, it's Cello. Happy review day! Let me start off by saying I completely agree with Sec and their review below. You should incorporate that fact that you're a girl ...

    May 29, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Shattered Spring

    'Ello, it's Cello, here to review! Happy review day! It's a few days late but welcome to YWS! I hope you've been enjoying the site! I actually really enjoyed this ...

    May 29, 2016
  • Poetry » General, Politics Re: Flawed

    'Ello, it's Cello here for a review! Happy review day! I'm just going to jump right in. (It's been awhile since I've seen an acrostic poem so hopefully this will ...

    May 29, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic Re: The Miserable

    'Ello, it's Cello here to review! Let me start by saying welcome! I hope you enjoy your time here at YWS! Because it works best for me, I'm going to ...

    May 25, 2016


fun fact i hear my evil twin once wrote a story about a hacker who used the name fyshi33k bc there are 33k-ish species of fish and she liked phishing so fyshi-33k made sense but then she got super embarrassed when someone forced her to explain
— VyperShadow