Chakeber

Sooooooo, I'm not really sure what this is supposed to be. It's like two sentences. So I'll give some different opinions, based on different angles. "She was wondering how awful ...

Who is she? Is she stopping the heart? Does your heart go off when she stops? Is she the life? What's this "In-" Is it supposed to be "What petty ...

I love the idea. I've inferred that it's raining. Maybe you could add something to describe how you hear the raindrops compared to how your tears feel. Maybe you could ...

Okay so in the first stanza I don't really enjoy the word "ticks" it seems really primitive and unpleasing to the reader. And just to make sure I wasn't just ...

Hey there! I really love this poem, it's pretty and tells a really cool story about determination. There are a few things I would change though. Feel free to make ...

This is really good. One minor spell check before the juicy stuff- I think it needs to be "shade" of red and not "shad" Moving on, I got some different ...

I like the overall idea of this poem. Maybe you could have worked a bit harder on it, made it flow better and sound better to the reader. But right ...

This is a great poem, I can tell it means something to you. It's also really cool to break up in my mind. Picturing it. I can picture a girl ...

Wow this is an amazing poem. I honestly hesitated reviewing it at first because it looked so long but the minute I started reading it grabbed me and pulled me ...

hmmmmmmmmmm.............. well... it doesn't seem so much a poem as a sort of... instruction form with thoughts of each instruction. Maybe it's what you intended to do. But it didn't ...

This is an amazing poem! It is so visula and gives so much life! In my m0ind, I pictured the national park, with a hillside, and young people around a ...

It is a gorgeous poem and I cant tell you put a lot of though, time, and heart into it. It's wonderful. I feel like even if it weren't in ...

It's an absolutely a gorgeous poem. It gave me serious shivers and emotion. You can tell she's feeling broken and he's full of goodness, but they can't really be together. ...

It might just be me, but I had a hard time comprehending it. It was a bit confusing to tell what you were trying to portray, there were tons of ...

Wow, I loved this poem. I very different approach to spelling out hat you feel. I can picture the ballroom empty and lonely, and can tell how you wish you ...