Who is she? Is she stopping the heart? Does your heart go off when she stops? Is she the life?
What's this "In-"
Is it supposed to be "What petty thoughts." As a statement? Not really enjoying the punctuation,
The rest is great I love the idea of it saying that sometimes you feel like friendship is a waste because you'll die anyways.
Wait one other thing, whats with the sword and dragon? I know its a poem but I feel like that came out of nowhere. Maybe put some reasoning to that.
You have a great mind. Keep writing!
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