Caesar

hey veer. I would like to talk to you about fear. It's a powerful emotion, and it can come in many different shapes and forms. There is primal fear, fear ...

Hello hello, there are some things that need work in this chapter, mainly your description and your dialogue. And your dialogue. Don't tell me the forest gained new light and ...

Hello hi yes you use a lot of pretty words in this like 'deep sienna brown' and 'enchanting essence', all very pretty words good job kudos to you and all ...

Yo. I like Rio a lot already, even with so few words on him compared to say, Marea. You know why? You've created emotional attachment. He desperately wants to save ...

Yeah I have absolutely no idea what's going on now. Remember that vagueness I was talking about in the first part? It's brought up to eleven here. There are a ...

Such fantasy. Much young adult. Very drama. Wow. Unlike poor Doge, the content here isn't that dated, at least. I do appreciate the fact she's gained power right at the ...

Hey General, here to drop some thoughts as promised. I can't say, but it seems that the events here are something that either happened before the story takes place, or ...

Good day to you. I'd like to talk to you about dreams, those dreams that seem like reality, but turn out to be not-quite-so, and terrifying. The key to crafting ...

hey, I will go ahead and mention that out of context, the drama is lost on me. I can't relate to them because I don't know the events that led ...

Good day to you. I don't usually read romance, and I don't like romance as the focus of a novel. Therefore, mayhaps my opinions will be valuable, as someone completely ...

Ahoy! Chapter seven, what to say on chapter seven. I'll start by saying I find it less than credible. After four doses of excruciating poison, Valdor should be an incoherent ...

H3y ther m8, my quest to think furiously on your novel continues. I'll be concentrating mainly on chapter six, as it's the one with the most untapped potential. I believe ...

Good day to you. I'll be posting more thoughts. Chapter three first. I understand why you said the prologue is related to this third chapter now. However, having now read, ...

yo. I'll be dropping my rigorously non-grammar-related thoughts on these chapters, as promised. Though I am contradicting myself, I feel compelled to mention something, grammar-wise, that nagged me, e

hey there, I'm Judas and I'm pleased to review your chapter today. It seems as though this chapter takes too many things for granted. Crafting an opening is tricky business, ...