Blackwood

This was amazing. Incredibly so. Why does the fat man have a black mustache and white hair? Its a bit of an odd image. ‘What is it thatyoudo?’ Is the ...

THE RHYMING IS BRILLIANT GOOD JOB YOU. I feel like you need to make some stanzas just for the sake of breaking it up some so its easier to see ...

FIRSTLY. Money mortal things may bring needs rephrase or comma. reminds me of yoda, I know what your saying but its a bit fixed up. NEXT. buying everything without tire ...

I like. I like. When I first started reading this it sounded a bit like a synopsis which made it feel incomplete, but as I read on I gradually got ...

I very much like this. It reminds me of my first poem on this site. I do know from experience because I like to write poetry like this that is ...

I don't know the song very well but I think i heard it before. This was really funny to go with any song and I particularly like people who mock ...

Fahrvergnügen! I do love beds. Sleeping is indeed bliss, good job on capturing this. I feel like you need to pay a bit more attention to the punctuation simply for ...

Good job on this poem From this poem I got the meaning of standing strong against all odds which you portrayed through the use of an extended metaphor of a ...

This story was written in the form of a sort of moral story or myth. I like this very much. However I expected there to be some sort of hearty ...

This poem was really good! It had excellent rhymes and I really enjoyed it. I see you are dissatisfied with your title. Perhaps you can take a line for your ...

I was confused at this poem. First up the first two lines. The wave is torn and shorn, With a wave of a fiery thorn, This doesn't really make sense. ...

This is a very interesting poem that is very literal and captures the sense well. Overall I say that the whole piece is a job well done. Outside birds are ...

Here are my three-ish lines that I felt needed a little tweak. turning fatal too fast to see. Just the length of this, I think you should turn it into ...

Great poem. Great rhyming too! Only one line made me feel a bit uncomfortable and that was the very last line. now I see the foolishness in making a limit ...

Yeah this was nice. You have always been an excellent writer my dear Rina. I know you understand when I imply that I may or may not have read this ...