Blackwood

Love the poem. It is very real and it is a reality that we all have to face. (I know for me it's sooner than later) You have some good ...

"it isn't 1812 that cleopatra doesn't reign" that's saying that she does. I think you have your words tied here. This poem was intereting. It walks a dangerous line because ...

The thing I like the most about this is it's subtleness. Through the use of so few words you can convey a sense of so many. From this poem I ...

Love it. You and me are very similar in our choice of subject matter buddy. This poem reminds me of a poem I wrote called "no Heroes midst us" you ...

Good job ;)

You know what. I am going to take my sweet vengance on you. I was meant to be alseep ages ago because the holidays just ended and I have shcool ...

This this this this this this this this smells like an onion took a fly swat and spanked a birds shiny bandan on the back it actully sounds that ridiculously ...

I love the idea and some of the imagry that you have used here but I feel like the poem as a whole lacks a sense of poetic uniformity possibly ...

I think the ending is fine. The whole thing is funny and I like it. I'm on an iPOd now so it's hard to copy and paste quotes and I'm ...

Simply lovely. I am now on an iPod so please exuse my abundance of spelling errors due to lack of spell correct and the uneffectiveness of autocorrect. My only critisism ...

1. You mean scoff down a bagel, not scarf. 2. I love it how every sentence is short and sharp. Sudden just like a boom. It really reflects the urgency ...

I like the idea and sense of this. A poem but caught just before a story. I feel like to make it more poem like you need to break the ...

Love the first line about the bricks. the bricks are warm beneath my feet, made so by the burning summer sun However the second line could do with rephrasing. I ...

I feel like, for a poem, your setances/lines are too long and you can easily have several linebreaks there and have stanzas instead. For example: Instead of The creeping death ...

This is a sudden dark twist on the previous part. it came as a shock to me but after reading it I liked it. I thought it would be nicer ...