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I think you had something that you were focusing on in the first stanza which was lost before you got to the end. It almost seems like you had a ...

This poem read like people talk, which is nice, but it also makes the poem a little boring for me. I was hoping that you would go into the annoying ...

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This is a delightfully puzzling poem. I really enjoy how short it is as well. It doesn't say anything it doesn't need to and it leaves things open enough for ...

I didn't read all of this, it's rather extensive and I'd like to review your other work you put up recently as well. First thing first, if this is the ...

This has a really great use of plot development. I love how we start out with a summary of fear and a frightful thing that would make anyone scared, then ...

This could use quite a bit of elaboration. I would strongly advise jumping right into the thicket of the plot, a guy with no food, no clothes, no job, no ...

A fun fact that may be fake: Edgar Allan's Poe, Raven, was based off of another work which he then spun into his own story completely unique. My point: If ...

Welcome to YWS. I hope you don't mind me reviewing your poem. It showed up in the green room, as everything does when it is posted, and I like reviewing ...

When I first started this poem, I found it somewhat hard to, read because of the, pauses. Let your thoughts flow as freely on the paper as they are from ...

This is a good preface. There's not much to really talk about. Reading out loud, I was cut off before the chance to breath in several places, so I would ...

It’ s a rainy S oundview- S omething S treet upon Gig Harbor, a s wollen sky of a s emi-preciou s grey[u] s [u] that cloud s of s ...

Ok, this is my first time seeing this poem, so I will give you my initial impression, my comments, then reread it and give you my secondary comments. My initial ...

For places other than this site, I think the title would lose some value. I would suggest changing the title depending on the area it is located to something like ...

As a poem, I like how you used the beat to relate the two times and the use of a time reference with two weeks. You have a good use ...