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  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic Re: Wreck

    Hey @Artemis28, fantastic poem. It certainly describes the bumpy ride that is called "Love" and it's ever so impossible components. I think it's great that you wrote this, as many ...

    Dec 17, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Action / Adventure Re: Tiko chapter TWO!!

    Hey GoldenArrow, welcome back. First off, I'm going to point out that anytime you continue a story with a different chapter, you want to lead up to where you left ...

    Nov 19, 2016
  • Other » Other, Action / Adventure Re: Tiko

    Okay, I like this setting. But first, I want you to look at a few things that I think you might want to change. Firstly, in the first paragraph, you ...

    Oct 27, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Don't Bother Trying

    Oct 10, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Eternal Rain ( has nothing to do with @EternalRain)

    This poem confused me. Great form of emotional drive, but I couldn't quite determine what you were writing about. It seemed like a mix of your emotions with the weather. ...

    Apr 3, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The constant battle with hell

    As always, I will love your work! This piece was very well put together. I love the rhyming throughout the poem. Most people tend to use very generic words, but ...

    Apr 2, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Horror Re: Screaming Whispers In A Silent Riot

    Dear God, never have I ever read such beautiful contradictions. This piece is filled with metaphors. Actually, the whole poem is based on a play on words. The "Screaming Whispers" ...

    Mar 24, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Rock bottom to Almighty

    Man. This gripped me so bad. I completely understand this to an extent. I've gone through the same thing. This piece is great! Not only did you write this with ...

    Dec 30, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: inferno

    Great poem, mintanchor! I completely adored how you kept the theme of the poem on fire the entire time. I was captivated by your choice of words, your imagery, and ...

    Nov 25, 2015
  • Poetry » Humor, Literature Re: I've Reserved For You

    I guess this is not much of a literary piece. It's more of an expression. But hey, I liked the boldness. I found it quite funny honestly, even though I'm ...

    Nov 15, 2015
  • Poetry » Other, Fantasy Re: This is Reality

    Hi HolographicLadybug! Great poem! Awesome vocabulary! I loved the imagery you gave the poem in just a few lines. However, I don't understand how these relate to one another. So ...

    Nov 14, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic Re: The One who Can't Love Me

    Hi Enflicted! This is a very dramatic poem. I loved the choice of words you used, like "hated", "torn", and "gone". They definitely pack a punch to the meaning and ...

    Nov 14, 2015
  • Poetry » General, Realistic Re: family ties

    Great poem. I can completely relate. The 2nd verse was exceptional, "once my favorite phrase". I loved how you used it. It was almost like a sucker punch, because in ...

    Nov 5, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: No More Knowledge

    Hello ChocolateCello. I loved the poem all together. Yet I was sort of confused with the beginning of the poem. I have read the book "Fahrenheit 451" by Ray Bradbury, ...

    Oct 27, 2015


The words you speak become the house you live in.
— Hafiz