A boy who used to be so kind
started to only write his feelings
in mainly rhymes
cases of poems
from a boy gone mad
trying to get his mind
off of the past
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Hey Max! As others have mentioned in the comments, I also really enjoy short poems! I find it a lot easier for me to stay engaged and it’s less overwhelming if there isn’t so much text. Your poem really caught my attention, and the content is very interesting as well. I thought I would leave you a quick review:
You mention, “a boy who used to be so kind” Who I assume is yourself. You started to write your feelings to express the way you feel to others. I totally relate to this. Writing poetry is also coping mechanism for me, and it is allowed me to express how I feel and so many different way. I love how you state you were boy who had gone mad because of the past. You use a really interesting and engaging vocabulary here, using words like “mad”. I am so glad that poetry has helped you escape from the past. It’s definitely helped me too.
In terms of technical things, This poem is very simple and doesn’t use any punctuation. It’s one long thought, which I really like, because it feels like we’re living inside of your brain seeing how you think as you reflect on writing poetry it was very powerful. Overall, this is a sweet poem and I hope to read this soon. Have a wonderful day and keep on writing!
Your friend,
Ellie
Hi!! lolita18 here, sneaked in for a quick review.
so i won't say, i understand your feelings because that is not possible.
Nobody can "understand" you COMPLETELY.
But it is relatable to so many levels. i think this poem expresses that phase when you have nobody to tell your opinions and then you find a solitude in writing.
this feeling is expressed so beautifully through this piece.
i loved it.
Hi yourlocalsatanist!
Rida here for a review!
I’m a sucker for short poems, because I think anyone who can express emotions in a few lines is a Poetic God, you know?
I think this poem is a very good example of that! I loved the way it expresses a story- that’s a very interesting tactic in poetry!
Moreover, it reads very much like a light, almost nursery-rhyme-ish poem, which works very well for the current theme of the poem!
It’s simple, efficient, and very cool! Keep writing, and have fun!
Yours truly,
Rida
very relateable, maxy waxy poo its good to write your feelings to cope instead of other ways, good job!