Young Writers Society

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!

Anyway let's get right to: Kate's Line by Line Reactions;

“I don’t know if this has been happening to you, Kellen, but this has been happening to us.” Nicole says. She begins rinsing her face with water. Why? I don’t know.

Oh right! The makeup!

Once she’s done with washing her face, I go over to the sink.

I’ve gotten used to the pudgy feeling of the foundation that I’ve forgotten how my real face feels, but goodness, taking all of this off feels so much better!

Kellen and Beth aren’t going to believe what they hear…

Hello! Ley here to review this delightful work for you. Today, I’ll be using my 'Autumn-Themed Review Template'! We'll begin with my initial impressions, then delve into the aspects that stood out like the vibrant hues of fall, and then get into the critiques. I hope you find this review insightful, and that you're enjoying the cozy charm of autumn, wherever you are in the world! Let’s dive in!

The First Signs of Autumn
Back with another review! This is a very short story, so this review might be kind of short. I'll try my best to give you awesome feedback! I also haven't read many of the other chapters, which I'll be sure to do sometime during RevMo. I saw this one looking lonely in the greenroom and decided to give it some love. :3 Let's get into it <3

A Golden Harvest

Oh right! The makeup!

Kellen and Beth aren’t going to believe what they hear…

Once she’d done with washing her face, I go over to the sink.

Once she’s done with washing her face, I go over to the sink.

Hello Hello, I hope you dont mind me popping with a quick review. I will apoigze as I don't have a fancy review template but if all the code works you will get my RevMo banner! I think that will make up for it in some way, However, I think that's enough rambling. Let's get into it, shall we?


Overall this is a nice piece, I am glad we picked back up from the last time. This does seem like good news for the cast. ( One would hope, this is a horror thing so it could be horrible for them. ) Whatever curse or creature that kept them stuck in this make-up seems to be fading but not much is known past that. The worst might be yet to come.

Now I hope you don't mind me going straight to feedback as this is a short piece. Please do keep in mind I am not a professional nor do you have to use anything I say. You are the author after all.

I won't go too much into it but I do feel like a little fleshing out could help this out. This is just my oppoin though as I would have enjoyed getting to their reactions a bit more.

This second bit of input I don't want to frame this as fact as it would be me missing something. I haven't watched the original film but I think you typed the wrong name in the first line. You have Kellen there but later it's said that they aren't going to believe it implying they aren't there.

Other than that I couldn't find much. Happy RevMo! I hope you're having a great month and thank you for tagging me. As always keep writing and drink water!