A day's tiring work
and at dusk she began her walk,
satisfied, that tonight,
there was enough food for all.
Night fell around her
and her eyes glistened with tears,
oh! How she wished
her husband was here.
But he was long gone:
he was killed in the coal mine,
"Feeding us all," she thought,
"The responsibility is mine."
Toughening up, she walked on
and soon she reached home,
without further delay,
she lit the stove.
The children saw the food
and cried with delight,
the family of seven
ate heartily that night.
Some food was left over,
she stored it in the plate;
glad that there was food
for the next day.
Just then she heard a sob
from the next hut of the slum,
"Ma!", Her child cried out
"He's hungry-- the neighbour's son."
The child took the extra food,
went to the next hut, gave it away.
She smiled and thought, "With such deeds,
poverty will end one day."
-Written in late July, 2017 for a competition on the topic "We can end poverty."-
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Hi @thegoldenbird
so beautifully you have written this poem about ending poverty. smooth ,short and impactful.It clearly imparts the message that "SELFLESSNESS IS THE KEY TO END POVERTY."
You clearly gave the message how others problem is ours.
indirectly giving message to the masses to be selfless think of others and make this world a happier place to live.
Indeed by doing this we might end the gap of rich and poor and end poverty from this world....
ALL THE BEST FOR YOUR FUTURE POEMS !!!
Thank you for your appreciation, Bhavya.
welcome@thegoldenbird.
Hi thegoldenbird,
Wow! I really love this poem. It has such a powerful message and was written very beautifully. I really liked how you wrote a story of a typical day of a person living in poverty. You eloquently described the hardships that people may not realize that they go through. I also liked how you ended the poem with the idea of how generosity and giving even though you may not have much yourself, can lead to a decrease in poverty. Additionally, I thought that the flow of the poem was fantastic, it felt like it had a rhythm and was pleasant to read. The one adjustment I have would be to change the word "lighted" in stanza 4 to "lit" because I think that that makes more sense. Other than that, great job! I look forward to reading your future works. Good luck and keep on writing!
Thank you for the review and the words of appreciation. I have made the correction, thank you for pointing it out.
This is very well written, I hope you did well at your competition!
Thank you