Mine Friend

Hello! This is a very beautiful piece detailing the intimate friendship of two very close people. The old English was distracting at times, but I felt it gave the open it's own flair, if you may. You do a great job of portraying how thus friend is your one beacon of hope in a cruel world that has done you wrong. If I had to critique perhaps you could go over the old English language used? I'm not very familiar with old English but some phrases sound off to me. However it's impressive you wrote thus when you were only 14! Keep up the good work!

Hello there! This is Vilnius with a review.

First off, I really like the Old English/medieval way this poem reads. It's Shakespearean, which I'm normally not fond of, but I think you used it really well here! I really think that you've crafted a really good work here.

Did you revise it before posting, as you wrote it in 2017? I'm only asking because it's an older work, and it's normally a good idea to revise before sharing.

Have a nice [*insert time of day*]!

Hello, I am here to review this poem. I liked the devotion between the friends mentioned in the poem. I believe a good friend with a boundless patience is an amazing thing and the narrator is lucky to have him or her by their side.

Another wonderful thing is a friend who supports you even if others have turned their backs on you. I believe the fact that the narrator gives maps of their hearts to their friend shows a level of trust so deep that has to be mutual. And i love the fact that the friend is descried as "noble, not capable of such despicable acts" like causing heartache.

Love is a good mender and like a healing salve, the most efficient one I've ever known. In the poem it's also like a needle capable of sewing the wounds of the heart.

In other words loved your poem, as it shows how strong philia can be.