will you please come home?

Hello,
This poem was very emotional and I like how you just come out with a topic like this, not covering it up with uneeded details or descriptions. It's sharp, sarcastic at times and well written. It really takes a stab at your heart since missing child pictures are something we see every day but can't do anything about. I like how you question what you see, don't just take it as they give it to you "...but how do you know?......". The only thing I didn't like was the ending. "If you love them, well, then why did you let them go?" It's a little confusing. I mean I'm sure the majority of parents love their children and protect them best they can, they don't just "let them go." It was probably an accident or something they couldn't control. Anyway, fantastic poem.

This is great, Sarebear. I really liked the bluntness. You have pulled it off really well.

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I like this. Alot, actually. It was somehwat depressing, though I enjoyed it either way. I'm guessing Bret and Brandon are the people your writing about in this peice. A desire to go to them....If I'm correct. Also, In the title you should've capitalized the first letter of the title.

Keep writing.

~Katie

I like the way you portrayed your message in a casual (but not too casual ) way. Your rhyming scene and flow was flawless. Your conventions were well executed. Over all a very good piece of work.
I do have one question though: Is this message for a certain person?
Anyway, my rating:4.9*s
keep it up!

w&w

I really enjoyed reading this. The casual rhyme scheme keeps the rythm whilst not sounding forced, the conversational language keeps the reader interested and your message is portrayed perfectly. Only suggestion is that you break it down into a couple of verses because I find a big block of text quite intimidating to read. That's just personal preference though. Great poem, beautifully written. Well done!