I, Too

may i borrow this......for realz...... really good poem.Quality work and authentic swag to it. I know swag is not appropriate for describing a poem but it just happened.

Great work, looking forward to more; keep writing and posting. I shall be here waiting.

Jealousy has consumed thee! You have made a clear portrayal of this and obviously wish to become even someone else to gain their possessions/skills/accomplishments! Even though you have used vulgar language, it has been shown at quite an appropriate time, expressing your emotions with vivid quality.

I really do like this poem! It had a nice sway to it, now I also agree with the last review but I disagree with one thing. People like stanza, it makes it look like a song maybe they would like to sing along with. I do think you could of added in some smilies and Imagery cause that would just set it off; but, overall it was a great poem. This is a poem people want to read over. Keep up the writing!

I like this. I like the sort of rhythm it has. I like that you didn't stanza it.

I think everyone can relate this to a person who seems to be entitled to the world but doesn't think you (or others) are.

The only issue I had was this line:

But apparently that freedom
wasn’t mine for the taking,
was yours for the guarding
and for me, just breaking
any trust there might have been
because you wouldn’t let me.

I think you may have to shorten it, or divide it into two, or maybe just clarify what you wanted to say.