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The Last Days Prologue (Sequel to The Prophecy)

The furious will be unleashed, the masked will be unmasked,
for those who are chosen will rise against the darkness that draws nigh
Till the end will they fight endlessly

THE LAST DAYS EPILOGUE

It had been three years since the war with Andorra and the Kingdom of Zilda lived in peace and so did Zelda. A big change took part in who would be the next rulers of Zilda; Samuel had fallen in love with Danielle and married her instead of Ella. Both Ella and Samuel realized they didn't truly love each other after all and had fallen for someone else. Once Samuel and Danielle married, Ella asked her father if she could marry Cynric for he was the one she loved. Even though Ella would have never ruled any other kingdom, she was happy being with Cynric and they lived happily in the castle with their families…. . Herman had left the kingdom to start a new life and travel the world by himself. But he said he would return and visit them sometime in the future. Alec whom had come back to Zilda with them studied to become a doctor and help those in need of healing… Everyone lived happily…. And Danielle and Samuel had started a family of their own…

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Danielle woke up to the sound of a babies cry which sounded about a few feet from her and Samuel’s bed. Danielle yawned and quickly removed the blankets from off of her and walked toward a light pink cradle which had small blankets dangling on each side. Inside the cradle, was a sobbing, one year old baby with light blonde hair and clear green eyes. Danielle smiled tiredly at her baby and she leaned over to scoop him up in her arms. He felt light as she held him there while standing next to the cradle. While moving him up and down slightly, she spoke to him gently,

“Stop crying, stop crying, it’s alright. Momma’s here.” She repeated it over and over again but he wouldn’t stop crying. A minute later, Danielle became irritated. She hated it when her baby cried all the time. She was just about to call a maid to come take the baby but she heard Samuel awaken.

“Danielle, just come back to bed and bring Sabriel with you,” Samuel told her.

“Are you sure?” Danielle asked him. She never had Sabriel sleep with them before.

“Yes. Now come on.” Danielle walked back to the bed and laid Sabriel in between them. Then she lay down and lifted the covers over them. Sabriel continued to cry.

“Sabriel,” Samuel said looking at the baby and touching his cheeks. “Come on, stop crying now.” Danielle watched him speak to their baby and put his hand on his stomach.

“He must have had a bad dream,” Samuel said. Danielle nodded. She put her hand on Samuel’s and they both spoke to Sabriel in soothing voices. Soon, Sabriel began to quiet down and then fall back to sleep. Danielle smiled and then looked at Samuel.

“You’re pretty good at this aren't you?” She asked him. Samuel smiled back.

“We both are,” Samuel replied. They smiled at each other for a moment until Samuel reached over and pressed his lips against hers. It was a small sweet kiss and when he pulled away, they both laid back down. Danielle looked at the dark ceiling and wondered.

“Can you believe it’s been three years since the battle against Andorra?” She asked Samuel. “We went through so much together and look where we are now.”

“Yeah… I know…. It’s hard to believe it’s been that long…” He replied tiredly.

“I’m going to miss Herman,” Danielle also said. Samuel nodded. Danielle glanced over at him even though it was too dark to see his face.

“You’re tired. I’ll let you sleep,” she said.

“Mmhmm.” Danielle smiled and then reached over and poked his cheek playfully.

“Hey, I’m really not in the mood. I’m tired.” Danielle laughed quietly. She wasn't tired any more but she closed her eyes anyway and tried to sleep. But she couldn't. Instead she found herself in a pure, white, spotless realm. Danielle looked around expecting to see the mysterious woman again and she did. She stood in front of her with her white hair flowing and her same eyes that were a deep violet.

“Mystra?” Danielle asked her remembering the voices in her head telling her to use Mystra’s power while battling Andorra. The woman nodded and spoke,

“Danielle, I have come to tell you of your next duty as a chosen one…” Danielle stared at her. There was more for her to do? Was this part of the prophecy? What else was next?

“Yes?” Danielle questioned.

“Your next duty will be far into the future, passing many generations and where there will be a greater evil that will arise to destroy the world. Your role is to guide and protect a certain magical being to me. This being will either save the world or allow it to be destroyed. I need you to help her make that decision.”

Danielle gaped at her. After so many generations? She wouldn’t be alive then!

“But… how?”

“You will know,” Mystra replied. “Years after your death, you will be summoned.” Danielle stared at her, speechless.

“That is all now,” Mystra said and began to disappear.

“Wait! I want to know who you are!” She exclaimed but the whole white realm faded away and she found herself back in her dark bedroom. Mystra appeared in her mind and Danielle wondered who she could possibly be. Danielle closed her eyes. Well maybe, when I die, I will know. I just have to live normally until then. She thought. Then she remembered Mystra’s mention of a magical being and she wondered who or what it could possibly be. A Witch? A wizard? Or is it a creature? Danielle soon became tired from thinking and with that… she fell asleep.

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yubbies21
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Hello! It's a wonderful Day! Do you know why? It's....Review Day!

Ooohhh! The beginning of a book! All day I've been reviewing random chapters of books to empty the green room...:S

First off...I understand this is a new book, there was one before it. I assume that in the beginning you explain what has happened to the characters...Right? This is a creative way to do that, I liked how it was set apart in Italics.

Danielle could have had more emotion near the end. It just would have drawn the reader in more to make them understand better.

Happy Review Day!

yubbies21

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Cheetah
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Cheetah wrote a review · Sun Oct 27, 2013 7:18 pm

Hi there, Sarah! Cheetah here, ready to review your piece on Review Day! :D

This was really interesting and I enjoyed reading it. You have a nice voice and I was interested all the way through. I'm eager to know more about the prophecy!

I especially like the very end - the part with Mystra in it. Oftentimes it's difficult to write about things that will have a great impact later on, but you did it perfectly. Well done on that!

There were only a few small things that could be changed.

Danielle woke up to the sound of a babies cry which sounded about a few feet from her and Samuel’s bed.


If the "babies" is possessive it should be changed to "baby's". Otherwise it sounds like there might be more than one.

Inside the cradle, was a sobbing, one year old baby with light blonde hair and clear green eyes.


I don't believe you need the first comma.

Other than that, this looks really good! This is a very good example of a prologue (I saw the review below ;)) It gives you information that wouldn't come naturally elsewhere. Good job!

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Deanie
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Deanie wrote a review · Sun Oct 13, 2013 10:35 pm

Hey there Sarah!

So I saw this and thought, yay, more of the story has been posted! But this is the sequel. Because it's the start of a whole new book, how about you call it the prologue instead of the epilogue. Makes more sense that way.

Let me start with the only nitpick I managed to find: "removed the blankets from off of her " This sounded a little awkward. If you say she removed the balnkets, I think that's enough and the reader understands the action already. It also makes the phrase more subtle because it isn't anything important that needs to stick out.

I liked how you told us how all the characters endings. But towards the end of this chapter, I think you could've played up Danielle's emotions a bit better. She's going to be disturbed during her eternal sleep! So much for rest in peace! And doesn't she love Samuel so much? Wouldn't she at least be strong enough to tell her husband what's going on in her life (once he wakes up)

Another thing to note is that at the beginning Danielle always says the baby or her baby. It was almost as if the child didn't have a name, although we later learn he does. So why didn't she use it? Seemed a little fishy to me.

I would like to keep on reading this, just like the previous one. So if you post on my wall or something when the next chapter is up, I would love to read it.

Deanie x

Thanks for your review. Yeah I'll call it the prologue. I just got mixed up with which is which. Anyway I'll let you know when the next chapter is posted. :)



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