Dance!

This was super fun to read! It had a really nice rhythm to it, which a really added to the fact that it was about dance. It felt a bit like dancing while I was reading it, which was a lovely feeling.

That being said, the rhythm sort of fell for me in a few places.

"Our foreheads glisten
In the night
Our lips curl upward
Faces of delight"

This stanza is so good until it gets to that last line. It might just be the way I'm saying it, but "faces of delight" doesn't seem to flow as nicely as the rest of the poem. Maybe try a line with less syllables? The last line of the poem has the same problem, I believe.

But other than that, this was beautiful and fun! Again, I loved the feeling of dance you got when reading it.

this poem was lighthearted, but it was also light on punctuation too. Just because it's a poem doesn't mean it doesn't have punctuation, or that the first letter of every line needs to be capitalized, so fix that, and well, you'll have an outstanding poem. It was very enjoyable to read, keep it up. Keep Writing!

Hi! This poem was upbeat and fun. I percieve that you have a keen love of dance, otherwise you wouldn't have written this poem. Unfortunately, I didn't feel any passion through your words. If you really love something, like dance, why not write about it emotively, and in that way, move your readers though your drive and commitment? This poem was good, but it was simple and perhaps boring. Thrust emotion and passion in your piece, make it into something serious and beautiful and emotive. That's my advice. But, Just my opinion. As regards what you've done, you're grammar was fine and the flow was nice and paced. Anyways, sorry if this was unhelpful...If you have any questions feel free to PM me
~ Alia