Two cops came to Savvy's house about 10 minutes after Margret called them. They burst in, pistols in their hands.
"PUT YOUR HANDS IN THE AIR! YOUR UNDER ARREST!!!"
"Oh gosh no...". Savannah leaped through the window that Margret already broke and ran to her car.
"SAVVY!?!", Caleb screamed out to her, "WHERE IN THE WORLD ARE YOU GOING!?!".
"Anywhere from here!", she responded.
"Oh, uhhhh..... SEE YEAH, COPERS!!!!" Caleb did exactly what Savannah did. He hopped in the front seat and Savvy started driving away as fast as she could.
"We need backup", one of the cops said. "I'll get the helicopters ready for anything.", the other cop said. "Calling in for backup!", he said into the mini-microphone on his uniform.
MEANWHILE............ "Savvy, what's going on?", Caleb asked suspiciously. "Why did police men come to your house?"
"Ok, Caleb, I didn't really want to tell you I loved you. I wanted to tell you that I'm a criminal in disguise. My real name is Alexis Hamilton."
"What!?! No way, that can't be true."
"Sadly, it is......", Savannah said with a sigh.
"Why didn't you just tell me?", Caleb asked, a little more upset than anything.
"Because ", Savvy started saying, "I was worried you would turn me in, and I couldn't risk that happening."
"Dude, I care too much about all of this to even think about turning you in!", Caleb said with a huff.
"But, now there is only one way to get rid of the cops...... and that one way is to kill them.........
Caleb didn't say a word to her after that. He just opened his mouth, and closed it again.........
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Savannah parked in a dark ally way. It was full of trash and Caleb spotted out a rat or two every once and a while.
"Why are we here?", he asked, pushing away a garbage bag.
"Because I need to reload."
"Reload?" Caleb understood what she meant after saying it to himself.
Savvy pulled out one machine gun and one pistol. "Which one do you want?"
"Do you really expect me to pull that kind of move right in front of police men!?!"
"Yep, pretty much.", Savannah replied.
".............Ok, you've got me there. Give me the pistol, but I wont shoot it."
"How else are you supposed to kill the cops if you don't shoot them?!"
"By making a plan of coarse! You pretend to beat me up, then throw me right in front of the cops. I'll look all bloody and stuff, then you throw the pistol beside me. Next, you will come out with the machine gun, and hopefully spook them. And, when they are least expecting it, I'll grab the pistol and purposely miss, which will scare them even more.", Caleb finished.
"Wow. That's not too shabby", Savvy replied. "But what do we do about the helicopters?"
"That's simple. After they see our 'little show', they should come down from the helicopter and then we will just spook them too. All we need now is some fake blood to put on me."
"Will ketchup work?"
"I guess so...... why?"
"I have a big bottle right here in the trunk!"
"Why do you have ketchup in-"
"Don't ask"
So the plan began.........................
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I really liked this and I liked how she has a giant bucket of kechup in the car.
This was one of the best chpaters I have read in my life. I cant wait until the next book comes out.
PUnchuation was wonderful and so was your spelling
YOu pur commas everywhere u need to.
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Great, great, great! Em101cats here for a review.
I didn't notice many errors, just so you know! One error I did notice is that you used the wrong 'your.' "Your under arrest!" Should be "You're under arrest!" But that's a small mistake that everyone has done at least once, so that isn't a bad thing, really.
There are some spelling mistakes, but everyone makes them. Also, remember to put commas, periods, exclamation marks and question marks inside the quotation marks.
Other than those few small mistakes, you did AMAZING and I look forward to seeing the next chapters!
~Em101cats~
cool! thx for liking it! and btw, the series finally is coming soon! its parts 9/10. and I did notice those errors but I will fix them asap! thx for ur concern about them
You're welcome! Can't wait for the finale! I will definitely not miss reading and reviewing that!
sweet! don't worry tho, cuz im gonna make Life As A Criminal BOOK 2!!!!!!!!!! more suspnce, more danger, and more teen love!!!
Hi,
First a few nitpicks...
Stuff in bold: "min" should be minutes.
Stuff in bold: I think you could word this better. Maybe, Savannah leaped through the window that Margret broke.
Stuff in red: It should be can't.
Stuff in blue: Ellipsis are three periods. You also do this throughout the chapter, just want to point that out.
Can't wait for the next part!
Raven,
thx for liking it, and like I said on parts 3/4, I do more than 3 dots on purpose, so I can be a little more original. I was typing fast and forgot about the apostraphy in cant and I thought the already-broken-by-Margret window sounds a little silly and im a silly girl ^_^ but I will fix this and thx again!