It's been two LONG months of high school. Savannah was really good friends now with Margret, Channler, and especially Caleb. Because of Savvy and Caleb being such good friends, she thought that she should tell Caleb about who she really was. But no........ she wouldn't dare. He could turn her in, and she cant risk that, no matter how much they cared for each other. No one could know, and if someone did know, Savannahs' life would be over. Literally. Because of her escape from jail, she was sentenced to DEATH if they could find her. That's why she couldn't reveal her secret. But maybe she SHOULD tell someone..... she felt like she would explode if she didn't tell someone. So Savvy decided to invite him over and tell him everything, even her criminal back-ground....... As Savvy walked to science class with Caleb, she just randomly asked him,
"Hey, Caleb? Are you busy today after school today?"
"Nope. Why are you asking?", Caleb replied.
"I was thinking we could come over to my house, so we can study for the 9 week exams."
"Cool. I'll be there.", Caleb said.
"Ok!", Savvy said back to him. "Looks like things are going better than expected", Savannah thought out loud.
Everyone starred at her for that. "What, like none of you don't talk to yourself sometimes!?!" Everyone walked off when she said that, and Savvy just giggled a little.
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"Alright, Caleb. This is my house.", Savannah said as they walked in.
"It's kind of........"
"Small?", Savvy said, finishing Caleb's sentence.
"Yep..... but what do I care? I have a small house too."
"Well,", Savannah started to say, "We better start. Ok, so what subject first? Science, history, language-"
"Savvy", Caleb said, interrupting her. "I know that you didn't invite me here to study. What did you really want?" Savannah took a long, LONG pause......
MEANWHILE IN THE SCHOOL PARKING LOT............ Margret walked up to Channler and asked him,
"Have you seen Caleb anywhere? I cant find him."
"Oh, he went to Savvy's house to study." Margret's eyes grew wide.
"What's her address!?!" Channler wrote it down on some notebook paper, and Margret grabbed it out of his hands. "THANKS!!!!!!!!", she said as she hopped into her car. She drove as fast as she could without going over the speed limit. Finally, she made it to Savannah's place. She listened and watched from the window at first. Savvy started talking.
"I have been wanting to tell you this for a long while, Caleb...... I'm...... I'm....."
"What are you!?!" Savvy completely changed her mind about telling him she was a criminal, so instead she said,
"I"M IN LOVE WITH YOU!!!", she said. She threw her hand over her mouth as if she shouldn't have said it.
"Really? Do you mean it?", Caleb asked. Savvy nodded slowly.
"I'm in love with you too......" Savvy and Caleb smiled at each other. Then, of coarse, Margret jumped through the window and made a big THUMP sound on the floor.
"WHAT THE HECK DO YOU MEAN YOUR IN LOVE WITH HER!?!?!"
"Margret!?! I can explain....."
"So can I, Caleb. WE ARE DONE!!!" Margret ran out of the house and jumped in her car with tears flowing like a river down her face. Savvy and Caleb just starred outside for a little while.
Savvy started thinking, "Maybe, just maybe, Margret is thinking something's up with me." And at that exact moment, Margret said, "I'm coming for you ALEXIS HAMILTON!!!!!" Margret grabbed the wanted poster for Savvy, and poked the eyes out of it. Then, she called 911. "Hello, officer? I've found Alexis Hamilton........."
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This was awesome!
I love what hepens and I cant wasit to see what happens next!!!!
your punchuation was wonderful and so was your spelling.
I thought you put the right comas where they were sopossed ot be. This book was
A for amazing
w for wonderful
e for exciting
s for something fun
o for I don't know one fo ro yet and
m for majestic and
e for exciting couldent thik of anything new
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Hi,
The story line seems interesting, a teenager on the run, exciting! But a few nitpicks.
Red stuff: What I learned in my school, is that you spell out any number under 10 (i.g. Zero to Nine).
Italicized stuff: In writing, I have found that writers italicize empathized stuff.
Red stuff: Ellipsis are three periods, you have about eight.
Stuff in green: When the green ends you should put a double quotation mark.
Italicized stuff: I wouldn't use more then one exclamation mark.
Blue stuff: In the beginning of that, there should be a double quotation mark.
That's what I found! Sorry if I sound harsh. If you need any help PM me!
Raven,
no no you don't sound harsh at all! all of those mistakes I didn't even notice! thx so much for that, and btw about all the random dots, I do that on purpose. I don't like just 3 dots cuz its so 'common' but thx again!
OMG OMG OMG PERFECT!!
I love everything about this! Great work, puppys3117! You do amazing books with amazing chapters and I can't wait for the next ones to come out.
Sure you have some spelling errors and apostrophe misplaces, but that's okay. For example, you said Savannahs' instead of Savannah's. The way you placed it make it indicate there are more then one Savannah XD But that's okay, it's just a typo everyone does it. Great work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
P.S. LOVE THE SUSPENSE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
lol THE MOB OF SAVANNAHS XD XD XD!!!! thx for liking it so much!
~puppys3117~
OMG SAVANNAH MOB XD You're welcome! You rock.
-Em101cats
:3 now I need to make a BUNCH of reviews cuz dis girl here is broke on points XD
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