Okay do I really care after you hurt my feelings more then onces,
Do I really love you still when you don't care about how I feel,
Am I going crazy for saying I still have feelings for you,
and I know for sure that I have No clue on what's going on,
Am I crazy for feeling like I want to cry when I see you,
or how about dying inside every time I hear your name,
Just promise me one thing and one thing only,
that you wont hurt this girl your with now like you did me.
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Where to start? Grammar, grammar, grammar!
The mistakes vary and are all over the place. You space out what should be one word (inside) and make a single word out of two (everytime should be every time). "Onces" isn't a word, by the way.
You need to work on your apostrophe use. I see "Dont" in lieu of "Don't" and "sayin" where either "saying" or "sayin'" should be.
Throughout the poem, the rhythm feels off, like this is a letter you tried to turn into a poem. It's too short, as well.
I would suggest more rigorous proof reading from now on.
thanks
Its suppose to be a little off that's the way I want it to be there's reasons be hide it. Oh and Yes it's suppose to look like a letter that's the way I write and also poems are all different lengths but thanks anyways.