I don't know HELP

Hey! I agree with Sare, you have a very promising piece here, If you remove some of the grammatical errors.

Am I going against fate and destiny,
because I cant get you out of my mind, can't.
after you broke my heart so many times,
you said you cared but, just ignored me, I don't think the comma after but is necessary.
you said you loved me but you cheated,
and I believed you for the longest time, Maybe take out and?
until one day when I saw you walking down the street,
holding some other girls hand, girl's
when I think to myself, why do I have, no comma after have.
to fall for such a complete liar, question mark after liar.
I have No answer besides I still love you Don't capitalize No, period after you.

Hey there,

Nice work on this. The emotion in it is very evident. If you don't mind terribly, I will pick at your poem, as creativemuse put it.

Am I going against fate and destiny?
because I cant get you out of my mind,
after you broke my heart so many times,
you said you cared but you just ignored me,
you said you loved me but then you cheated,
and I believed you for the longest time,
until one day when I saw you walking down the street,
holding some other girl's hand,
when I thought to myself, Why do I have,
to fall for such a complete liar?
I have no answer besides I still love you

Its okay thanks I will change that now

jolene15 wrote:

you said you care/cared but, just ignored me,
you said you loved/love me but you cheated,