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I liked it. It was very simple, but in poetry that's not always a bad thing. It sounds sweet and sincere, which is what I liked most about it. Keep on writing!
Howdy there!
I really liked your poem! I do agree that this poem needs a rating due to it's language content but that can easily be fixed.
I really liked the content of the poem and I thought the use of enjambment helped the poem to move freely. However, I agree with trackrunner1999, you need to put more into this poem. More emotion.
For this poem you needed to ask yourself:
Why am I sorry?
Who am I sorry to?
How am I sorry? (how to show it)
Rather than just feeling sorry you need to convey the emotions of bitterness, anger, maybe even lonliness.
But it's not a bad start. Well done!
Your poetry was vary thought out and expressive.But you need to make it flow better and make sure you put more feeling into the emotion you are expressing in your poems.
First of I want to welcome you to YWS!
So I liked the topic and how you want to be that person's friend but not be there for them when they are needed...am I right? 
Now this piece was alright but not the best that I've seen. UM...you might want to rate this 18+ since you have a cuss word and that wouldnt be appropriate for younger kids.
Overall I liked it and wish to read more of your work in the near future.